Water is definitely an invaluable resource. Without it, we cannot survive.
This part is boring and too obvious. Can you think of a clever way to start the essay? Something more meaningful and distinct.
Now we need to strengthen the argument. You wrote, "Once people realise that water supplies are limited and that they have a responsibilit
y to conserve water, this task will be easier. (After this statement, I think you should write a paragraph about the consequences of using too much water and the benefits of conserving.)
The rest of the essay is very well written, but it is not arguing. It is giving an overview. Think of a specific argument you want to make, like "Why people should try to conserve water," and stick to the argument. If that is your argument, you should not write about methods for conserving water. Only argue about the importance of conserving water. Actually, though, you can keep the part about the methods for conserving water, but use them to show how easy it is to conserve water. Pretend you are arguing with someone who thinks it is not important to conserve water.