This trend is not only restricted to the rich families where the women do not need to work because they already have enough money to cover for their family's everyday needs, but is ...
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The reasons for this trend may involve the recognition that there are so many things for women to do after they get married, particularly for those who decide to have babies. Raising children, taking care of the family, and keeping the house clean all is very tiring and time consuming.
Men might encourage their wives to stay home if their children are small and need a lot of cares and they can take care of getting money duty for the family, but it is also true that the woman can work while the husband stays home .
What if the man likes to take care of the baby and the women is making a career as a physician or a politician? In this essay, you still seem to embrace a world view that is oppressive to women. The 21st century understanding is that women and men both might like to spend some time at home and both might like to have a career.