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TASK 1. How tourists obtain benefits and drawbacks from Fairmont Island based on survey's results


Ra_fhli 22 / 17 8  
Nov 20, 2015   #1
The pie charts reveal information how tourists obtain benefits and drawbacks from Fairmont Island based on survey's results. Overall, it can be seen that the biggest advantages derived from the occupants, while the most common problems are high cost of living there. Both apparently almost have the same figures.

The main merit which tourists gain when visiting Fairmont Island is lead to by inhabitant at 40%. Despite that, the reason why holidaymakers to go to that place is thanks to the scenery there, representing at about 37%. While culture is the third rank influencing travelers to enjoy there at 12%, good accommodation still notices as the little advantages at only 11%.

On the other hand, the most common problems people worry to holiday in that place because of unreasonably living cost at about 45 percent. Likewise entertainment and food quality which are offered cannot attract the visitors. It is evident that 30% and 20 % people claim dissatisfied for those items. Weather condition just stands at 5% as the least disadvantages from the Fairmont Island.



vangiespen - / 4,134 1449  
Nov 20, 2015   #2
Rahmat, the report overview is complete and falls under the 3 sentence requirement which is the minimum for this sort of essay. The information you present is sadly, confusing to understand. Mainly because you failed to clarify the topic or subject of the sentences in question. I think that the confusion and problem with stating the sentence subject is because of your currently limited grasp of the English language, I do not doubt that your presentation will further improve as you progress with your practice tests. In the meantime, please take note of the following corrections to your essay.:

The pie charts reveaS information ABOUT how tourists obtain VIEW benefits and drawbacks from THEIR VISIT TO Fairmont Island based on survey's results. Overall, it can be seen that the biggest advantages derived from the occupants, while the most common problems are high cost of living there. Both apparently almost have the same figures.

- What is the advantage that was presented? Is that the same as the benefit? Clarify that overview portion even though you present the information in the body of the essay. It is an integral part of the overview.

The main merit which tourists gain when visiting Fairmont Island is lead to by inhabitant LIVING CONDITIONS at 40%. Despite that, t The reason why holidaymakers to go to that place is thanks BECAUSE OF to the scenery there, representing at about 37%. While culture is the third rank influencing travelers to enjoy there at 12%, g Good accommodation still notices as the little advantages IS HARD TO FIND AND RANKS at only 11%.

On the other hand, t The most common problems people worry to holiday HAVE WHEN ON HOLIDAY in that place IS because of unreasonably E living costS at about 45 percent. Likewise e Entertainment and food quality which are offered cannot attract the visitors EITHER. It is evident that 30% and 20 % people claim ARE dissatisfied for WITH those items. Weather condition just stands at 5% as the least disadvantages from OF the Fairmont Island.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Nov 21, 2015   #3
I have made slight improvements on your report writing. Hopefully you can notice them.

The pie charts reveal information how ...
The pie charts reveal information about benefits and drawbacks that tourists gain when visiting the Fairmont Island. Overall, it can be seen that the greatest advantage of this island is local people, while the most common problems noted are pricey living cost.

The main merit which tourists gain when ...
40% of tourists agree that local inhabitants are that the main merit, while some others say that breathtaking scenery is the reason why they visit this island. The data records about 37% of people saying this. Culture and accommodation are close behind, with 12% and 11% respectively .

On the other hand, the most common problems ...
On the other hand, the most common problem people worry ABOUT when holiday is the living cost, at about 45 percent. Likewise entertainment and food quality which are offered cannot attract the visitors. It is evident that 30% and 20 % people claim dissatisfied for those items. Weather condition just stands at 5% as the least disadvantages from the Fairmont Island.


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