toefl test The place you choose to live has a greater effect on you overall hapiness

The place you choose to live has a greater effect on you overall hapiness than you job does.

Today ,more and more people choose a place to live in relation to a lot of conditions.Generally , most people will considerate the first condition is the distance between the workplace and residence . Apart from that ,others believe the most important condition is depended on the happiness of their lives. I really agree with the latter view ,the reasons would be stated as the followings.

Admittedly , there is a certain advantage of living nearby. If not, it costs a lot of time to drive on the road. For example , if I lived far from my workplace, I would get up early with sleepy eyes and perhaps bear heavy rain in the summer and severe cold temperatures in the dawn of winter . But if I lived nearby, I can get up until ten minutes on the working deadline and walk to my office with eating a sandwich or hambuger.Of course ,it is not my actual working attitude but just giving an extreme example to demonstrate the point as the advantage of living nearby.Besides that, we may have breakfast with our family members sometimes and even have time to bid them before we have to work.

Although it has perfect excuses to live near the workplace,a few people choose that indeed.But why? In my opinion , firstly , job is just a part in our lives but not the whole.We take more considerations on the other sides,such as our health or our family members'hapiness. A place fits to work maybe not a place fits to live.Let us take an example , the place we worked may sit in a big cities where have severe pollutions in the air and lack of clean water.In order to get a better living environment ,we may choose to be settled in the suburban or rural areas although it gets a long distant from the workplace.

In another side,we must admit the life in a serious of variations, and we expect to get what we want. Maybe there is a job of which we were fond but it has some disadvantages including it is located outside our hometown. Would you give up this job for the excuse "oh, it is far from my home." The answer is "NO ,we won't." Obviously,we will choose work we loved and follow our own dreams.

For the two reasons dicussed above , I will choose to live a place with the overall hapiness than the job affects.

Thanks to everyone who give me the advice about this article.

.... This sentence is weak as an idea. It is not just nowadays, even earlier eras people chose their living area very carefully. I think you need to rephrase this a little bit to make it a strong sentence. This is your opening line, so it needs a punch.

When people choose a place of living they consider various reasons to make that decision.


people consider/ people will be considerate


...well you say you lived far away. Then tell straight that commuting to your office place had been a tiring exercise. Then talk about the hardships such as cold temperature, flood effects etc.

Most people will consider the distance between workplace and residence.


In my point of view, a job is just a part of life, not the whole life itself. ... add some spice. :)


A place that is convenient to work does not necessarily mean that it is a suitable place to live.

Hmm I like your essay. Although some ideas are not very clear. Try to fire up some of the powerful sentences a bit more. :)

Thanks again! I am a little upset, cause I do not have the English ability as well as others.Well, Iam not a native English speaker so that it was really difficult for me to made the complex and absolute correct sentence.Can you suggest me some advice in order that i can made me English express improved ?Not matter how , i will try my best.

Well... your writing is not bad and I feel you can go for a good score if you organize your writing more. Write simple, short, yet interesting sentences. The most important thing is that you pay attention to your essay structure. My recommendation is that you should stick to 4 para essay which includes introduction, 2 body paras and conclusion.

Introduction; Introduce your topic + State your opinion
In this essay, the argument is based on whether place of living has a major bearing on person's overall happiness or it is the job. So first, introduce this topic to the reader;

Some people believe that the place they live contributes more for their happiness than the job they do for their living. However, others believe that the job is more important for their Happiness. In my opinion, I believe that ??????????????? ( tell what you think the most important)

Then go to your body paras - Write your first reason as to why you hold that opinion. If you said the place of living is more important, then you have tell a reason for that. For example;

I find a great meaning in the saying "Home sweet Home". Home is the place that a person enjoys his entire privacy and freedom. (... here the reason I gave is one's privacy and freedom)

Then you support it with a specific example;
Suppose you are emotionally upset and you need to cry to let it go and come back to normalcy. Then it is the home that provides you that privacy because you cannot be always yourself in any other environment.

Then do the same with your 2nd body para. Finally write the conclusion which sums up everything you said above. Read the following essays to get a knack for this structure.