I really like this topic, and I thought I would produce a good essay. Ahah, however, it turned out to be quite different, as I really didn't know how to develop the ideas. In the end, I managed to complete, but it is so short, I think. There must be something missing in it, but I don't know how to improve.\
Topic: People listen to music for different reasons and at different times. Why is music important to many people?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.
Music is thought to be the first form of art to be born, and throughout the long history of human, it has proved to play an essential part in our lives. Hardly is there anyone who has never listened to a song. Hence, we all seem to owe many things to music.
Usually, people listen to music to entertain themselves. It is beyond any doubt that after hard working hours, music is the best 'medicine' for our tired brains, as it somewhat helps to eliminate stress and pressure. Maybe that is why music can be played everywhere; everyone, after working and studying, really needs music to refill their power.
A more powerful aspect of music is that it profoundly affects our sensation, or feelings. This can be seen from the roots of kinds of music. Rock music was created mostly to reflect anger, whereas ballads must have come out from romantic love stories, or from a painful heart. So, music is the reflection of our emotions. We listen to music when we are glad of sad, and it both cases, it influenced us. When feeling alone or upset, I only want to listen to my favourite songs and be drowned in it. Music, in this sense, can be a good friend, who gently heals our souls.
It is fair to consider music as 'chicken soup for the soul'. I cannot imagine how our world would go without music. Music, since its birth, has brought to life many real and immortal artistic values.
I can see why you are frustrated. This essay is relatively impoverished in terms of content, for such a rich subject. You probably have more to say than you realize. I wonder if you spent enough time thinking before deciding to write. One thing that you might have done before beginning to write would be to brainstorm all of the situations in which people listen to music. These include not only private listening but all sorts of social situations, such as festivals, funerals, weddings, parties, etc. Thus it would seem that music serves a social as well as a private emotional function.
Another thing you could have done would be to list the different effects that music can have on people. In addition to those you mentioned, I think about how music has been used to inspire soldiers to march or to fight and has also been used by prisoners and slaves not only to make bad situations more tolerable but also to communicate secret messages to one another.
Whatever else you could have done to generate ideas, you also ought to have made yourself an outline before beginning to write. Even if the outline is rough, it will keep you on track and ensure that you don't leave out anything you meant to say.
Well, thanks. I didn't think it so thoroughly. If I write about influence of music on soldiers, did you mean I should give examples of music's effects on specific types of people? I just thought to write about music in general.
By mentioning soldiers, I was just giving an example of the very many things you could have said to make the essay more full-bodied. Books and books have been written on the topic. The main thing, as I hope I made clear above, is to make sure you have enough ideas and to organize those ideas before you begin to write. The quality of the pre-writing work tends to determine the quality of the writing that follows.
Do consider the fact that music is quite a subjective term...A music to one can be noise to other and vice-versa...How about thinking from this perspective...
Ground the general in the specific. Always. Always. Always. I can't repeat this enough (literally, I keep having to write this in so many threads). You have written an entire essay on the importance of music without mentioning a single specific song. In fact, except for a single sentence in which you mention rock and ballads, you don't really even touch on specific genres.
I would recommend you to give specific genre of music that people would listen to relieve their stress from work or study instead of just saying that they listen to"music". For example, people would choose to listen classical when they are fatigued with work, whereas teenagers who are under pressure with studying would listen to rock to uplift their feeling.
