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The press should report the residents life who have some inspired story, not some celebrities rumors


Riiskacha03 31 / 34 5  
Jan 21, 2016   #1
The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballers. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?


These days there are too much news of how artists life their days and their issues with others, while some people believe that they have to give a shoot to non-celebrities citizens more. However, I strongly agree that the press should report the live about residents who have a motivated story, than information of others' issues.

There is a clear reason why media always present all about celebrities as their topic. It is because this kind of news are entertaining publlic. As an illustration to this, every famous person has their own fans, and those people tend to have hogh intention to receive these kind of information, such as their favorites schedule or newest appereance. In the end, the companies who provide these shows, would be able to attract their readers or watchers and have high rank for their ratings. That is why they keep serve inhabitants the material from creative person.

On the other hand, I immensely agree that audiences should be given more valuable stories. This kind of descriptions will encourage people to have a better life. For example, an autobiography of an ordinary man who starts his own business in such a young age. There will be more benefit, when watchers enjoy it, since they will have a motivation of starting create their brighter life. To conclude, it is important to present the beneficial information.

In conclusion, even though the news about some singer, actors or footballers provide entertaining effect, it is important to know how ordinary character build their life, in order to bring inspiration toward others, so they will start to develop their self, not consume celebrities scandals.
yus72 6 / 6 1  
Jan 21, 2016   #2
... news of how artists lifeRUN their days and their issues ...
... press should report the live about residentsPEOPLE who have a motivated story, ...
... present all about celebrities as their topic. It is becauseBECAUSE OF this kind of news are entertaining publlic.
aflah15 32 / 18 4  
Jan 25, 2016   #3
'how artists life their days'
Could you find the verb in this sentence? there is not verb here.

However , (why you use this word? it is not appropriate with your sentences ) I strongly agree that the press should report the live about residents who have a motivated story, than information of others' issues.

...every famous person has theirhis own fans,

...and have A high rank for their ratings.

...There will be more benefit, when watchers enjoy it
Hiddengrace 6 / 118 68  
Jan 25, 2016   #4
Hi Riska! I think you did a good job making your argument but some of your word choices seem very awkward to me. I've given it a rewrite to try and clean it up, and have it convey the same thing but sound more professional and fluent.

These days there are too much news ...

These days, there are too many news stories about celebrities, their daily lives and their confrontations with others. However, many people believe that the news should be about ordinary citizens with inspiring stories. I strongly agree that the press should report motivating stories of everyday citizens, rather than celebrity gossip.

There is a clear reason why media always present ...

I see a clear reason why the media always presents news stories and gossip about celebrities; it is because these kinds of stories are entertaining to the public. Every celebrity has numerous fans who care about this information and consider a celebrities favorite things, schedule, and newest appearances of the utmost importance. The companies who provide this news care most about ratings and having high rankings, and these types of news stories (while not really "news") attract the most viewers and readers.

On the other hand, I immensely agree [...] to present the beneficial information.

While I understand why media companies provide this type of news, I strongly believe that audiences should be given more valuable stories. News stories about ordinary citizens who overcome obstacles or inspire others to better their lives should more predominant in our news today. Consumers of the media will benefit by being motivated to create a brighter life for themselves. For example, if an audience sees a story about an ordinary man who started his own business at a young age, it might inspire others to achieve their dreams as well. Therefore, it is more important to present information and news stories that will motivate and inspire others.

In conclusion, even though the [...] not consume celebrities scandals.

Even though news stories about singers, actors, or footballers makes for an entertaining story and achieves high ratings, these are not the types of stories we should be viewing. To me, it is more important to learn about how ordinary people achieve their goals because these types of stories can inspire others to reach for their dreams and live a better life.
NourNour 22 / 39 7  
Jan 25, 2016   #5
These days there are too much news of how artists life their days ---------->Nowadays, there many news about artists' daily life

I strongly agree that the press should report the live about residents who have a motivated story, than information of others' issues. ----------->Personally, I strongly agree that press should focus more on successful people stories rather than spreading celebrities gossip.

I think you should mention the reasons that make you agree with this point of view in both the introduction and the conclusion.

Good luck :-)


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