My hometown is a bangkok city,Thailand.It is a very beautiful place and there are a lot of people moving here and there all the time.(kind of weird...)
I believe that my friend,Nicky will definitely love to live in my city due to many reasons.
The first and probably the most important reason is there are many place to travel.Since
nicky love to travel so
(delete one conj.) I think it would benefit her. In T
hailand,you can travel during day and night time.In day time she can visit many beautiful temples,such as wat phra kaew,wat traimitr or even visiting wat pho.There are not only temples
but there are also many places to visit like department store,floating market,deam world and etc.Moreover,at night she can enjoy night life by going to club or pub.There are also night bazaar which you can see many things such as
, souvenir, cloth, thai dress, foods , drinks and etc,
Besides that,in my city there are more
of education and job.There are many popular universities in my city such as chulalongkorn,thammasat or mahidol university (capitalize the name of the universities)
and there are also many popular public and private schools as well.Furthermore,in term of(well you can change it to other phrases like as for..)
job there are many jobs
available and you can easily find them
on the internet.In my city there are also easily accessible transportation eventhough trafic jam is the main problem in bangkok ,but there are sky train to reach
the place on time.There are many apartments in my city and some of them are near the sky train.
To sum up,Thailand is the land of smile.People are kind and always respect to each other.I believe that my friend nicky would not feel bored
or regret once she moves
in my city.Hi,wanthana pamee! I just help you to find some grammar errors in your essay. Generally speaking, your essay need some improvment on both vocabulary variety and paragragh structer. Though you use some words like first, besides...to make your essay more clear, the logic in each paragraghs does not develope very well. As for the grade thing, what kind of test?Anyway, keep trying and you will do better job. Good luck!