Thanks again for everybody who has given me some advices.
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Prompts: The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have weveral careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. (at least 250 words)
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It is or will be a mainstream that people make their living by more than one method. Comparing to living in the past, we confront economic depression and a more competitive environment in which spurs us to diversify our lives.
First of all, to survive from economic depression, an average salary of NTD 22,000 for a new graduate in Taiwan, youngsters need to gain money in various ways simultaneously. For example, except working as a research assistant, my colleague also invests on stocks and funds to support his family. Secondly, to triumph our rivals in a competitive society, new generations tend to attend further education to arm themselves with more qualifications and know-how. For instance, more and more people are convinced by institutions to take their courses to obtain more licenses for higher acceptance rate. Thirdly, as a result of the prevalence of the state-of-art technology, internet, we can earn money easily though online auction. Taking my sister-in-law as an example, her profit from online transactions is pretty much the same as my monthly salary.
On the other hand, there are still drawbacks of possessing several careers at the same time. Speaking of the loyalty toward employers, it is inevitable to decline at some level when there are 3 to 4 jobs holding in ones hand. Additionally, energy and focus will be split to look after every job instead of one. What is more, once we are able to earn money in different ways, people might sink into better material comfort than spiritual happiness.
Nevertheless, considering what we are facing now, struggling in such a competitive employment environment, I consider making our living by more than one method.
Your writing is excellent. I really don't know where to correct you. However, if your writing is to be formal, I think you should change the word "know-how" to "knowlege" because "know-how" is an informal word.
Secondly, to triumph our rivals in a competitive society, new generations tend to attend further education to arm themselves with more qualifications and knowledge.(Formal)
Secondly, to triumph our rivals in a competitive society, new generations tend to attend further education to arm themselves with more qualifications and know-how. (Informal)
Here are a few more corrections to practice!
The new trend will be mainstream for people to their livings by more than one method.
Compared to people who lived in the past, we modern people confront economic depression and a more competitive environment which spurs us to diversify our lives.----I made some small changes here.
First of all, to survive an economic depression, with an average salary of NTD 22,000 a new graduate in Taiwan needs to gain money in various ways simultaneously.
Thirdly, as a result of the prevalence of the state-of-art technology, especially the Internet, we can earn money easily though online auctions.
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