TOEFL independent essay
We all work or in jobs with many different kinds of people. In your opinion, what are some important characteristics of a co-worker (someone you work closely with)? Use reasons and specific examples to explain why these characteristics are important.
At work, we meet people from different backgrounds. In order to work in a productive atmosphere, co- workers must have some specific characteristics. Personally, I am inclined to work with collaborative and reliable people.
To begin with, collaboration is an important characteristic in a co-worker. It allows him to work within a team. A collaborative co-worker is ready to assist his colleagues even if this means that he has to work for extra hours. For example, a couple of years ago, while we were preparing for an important project, one of my co-workers had a family death which prevented him to come to work. So I decided with my colleagues to devise his work and do it on his behalf. It was a great initiative that helped the company and my co-worker as well.
Additionally, it is important to work with reliable people. In every job, there are secrets that must not be known by others. Therefore, it is important to work with co-workers who can be trusted and can count on them. For instance, one of my co-workers had told a work secret to a competing company. His mistake cost our company a valuable loss.
To sum up, there are many characteristics that a co-worker must have. As far as I am concerned, a co-worker must be collaborative and reliable. These two merits create a healthy environment at the workplace.
who can be trusted and can count on them.counted on
i think it it better to explain your points with more specific examples. and when you finishe illustrating your example, maybe you could clarify the relationship between your example and your point.
Nour, you should not have any worries about the way that you are developing your English writing skills. Like I said in a previous response to your work. you have the potential to become a very cohesive and logical English writer. This essay proves that point. Your work in this essay is such a far cry from the very first essay that you wrote that I found myself wondering if you and the person who wrote the other essay were one and the same person. I even had to double check the name of the OP just to be sure :-)
The reasons that you provided, which are based upon personal experience, are sure to garner you impressive points in an actual test. Such examples show a clear understanding of the prompt and its applicability to the explanation that you have provided. Excellent work! I have a feeling that you will continue to improve over time and that you will also continue to develop your vocabulary skills. this essay shows a moderate use of semi complex English words, the sentence devices you used were slightly advanced, and you managed to come across as a moderately advanced English user. So your score for this essay is sure to be around or above the passing score :-)
