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The monthly spending on different products of an average Australian kin in a 10 years period


Wiwik Mujahidin 21 / 3 1  
Apr 6, 2016   #1
The table below shows the monthly expenditure of an average Australian family in 1991 and 2001.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.


The table presents the monthly spending of an average Australian kin between 1991 and 2001. Overall, it can be seen that, the majority family spent their money to buuy other things and service, whereas the needs of clothing is the lowest.

In 1991, other things and service is the highest expenditure of people in Australia, at $250 per month, and in 2001 it was still the highest spending, although it increased to $270 per month. Then, food was the second needs who people spent their money per month at $155, it was different $5 in 2001. For the housing society exhausted their money at $95 and it increased to $100 in 2001.

However, expenditure for electricity and water in 1997 just $75 but in 2001, it increased to $120 per month. People spent their money for tranport just $70 per month and decreased at $40. While spending for clothing are just under all of demands at $20 and $30,1991 and 2001, it is the lowest expenditure of people in Australia.



justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
Apr 6, 2016   #2
Hi Wiwik, I would like to share some insights in your analysis.

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Wiwik, most of the statements are correct and some needs enhancement and this is what I suggested above. I hope this is useful and for future writing reference, mind the placements of your linking verbs, this are minor details but it is necessary that you be careful on using them in your sentences and if you can, refrain from using the word "just", this somehow belittles the idea that you are trying to foster in the minds of your readers.
dina79 20 / 26 3  
Apr 6, 2016   #3
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