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I always recall my childhood memories every time I look at my family portrait. I grew up in Minangkabau ethnic group, one of existed matrilineal society in the world. It is not surprising if I had a stronger bond to my mother. As the youngest child, I was spoiled and attempt to differentiate myself by being a little bit rebellious. Yet, life suddenly changed for me at an early age.
When I was in the 4th grade my mother passed away. She was suffering from myasthenia gravis, a rare chronic autoimmune disease. In couple month later, my father's business went bankrupt. We didn't have anything left, yet he never gave up on the circumstances. We had to stay at his friend's house and he tried to earn money by becoming a masseur. This happened till I finished high school. This life-changing experience shocked, not to mention that I was mourning for losing the most important person in my life. When I look at my father, I saw the value of hard work. He never showed me his sorrow. No matter how bad the conditions were he stood tall.
I had a great hope to continue my study in earth science. However, I knew that my father unable to pay me for college. Therefore, I didn't want to burden him any longer. Consequently, I put down my dream to go to school and decided to leave my hometown after high school in order to gain experience and work in Jakarta. I found my life was hard with all the economic problem and depression, but there are a lot of people whose lives are much harder. Luckily, I got a job as a shopkeeper in a toys store. I set aside part of my 2 years payroll in order to sign up for college, yet the money still far from sufficient. So that, I need to find another way.
One day, I found one of my uncle profile in facebook. The last time we met was at my mom's funeral. I came to his home with hope for his generosity to help me to continue my study. I know he had a good economic level and a high concern about education. Gladly, he agreed to help in funding my education. Then, He told me about his conversation with my mom a week before she passed away. She told him that she really had great hopes for her kids and wanted to see her children go to college and be successful, since she never been one. However, she entrusted my uncle to help me because she knew that she will never get to that. He helped me to gain back my spirit and objectify my mom's dream.
Finally, I took geophysical engineering. I'm grateful for everything I have now. The life toughens me and taught me the meaning of struggle. What makes us survive isn't because the life getting easier, yet we're getting stronger.