Well, as far as my view I have some suggestions
In conclusion , I believe that The ninety nine percent of the success depend on hard work while Only the one percent of success depends on luck . Therefore, The only one choice you have is work hard , if you want success.
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First , Scientists argue that In About million years ago Our ancentors was the apes. The only way the humankind emerged was labour .
Firstly, ... or First of all, ... than you can continued your sentence
2. Be aware of giving punctuation, I saw several space giving which is not suitable with your sentence.
luck .
luck.
There are someone around us who have succeeded by things such as gambling , lottery ,etc .
here are someone around us who have succeeded by things such as gambling , lottery ,[fonFF0000]etc.
In conclusion , I believe that The ninety nine percent of the success depend on hard work while Only the one percent of success depends on luck . Therefore, The only one choice you have is work hard , if you want success.
In conclusion, I believe that
the ninety nine percent of the success depend on hard work while Only the one percent of success depends on
luck . Therefore, The only one choice you have is work
hard, if you want success.