In the modern era, the media has enormous impact to society even it beat the influence of politicians. In this case, I strongly believe that although the media like TV or the internet which has a huge influence to the individuals, this still depends on the person considers both, between the media and politicians.
These days, a great deal of people cannot get rid of from information. They can obtain the information from the electronic media such television or radio, or they can access the news from their mobile with using the internet. Usually, inhabitants prefer to trust what they watch on television or what they read on the internet than what they hear from the politicians. For instance, a wide range of populations is believed up to date news from media which is viewed has more complex information than just from politicians who solely provide the information about politics.
On the other hand, despite the media give a lot of information, the people cannot compare it with the politicians since they are correlated with each other. This is caused because sometimes the knowledge from the politicians more accurate, compare with media which too much information what has to be understood by citizens. For example, at politic party, there are many candidates will share their visions and missions to the societies who they are as a chooser. The candidates certainly hope they gain high popularity in the society by promoting their selves on the internet even local television programs.
The aforementioned evidence reveals that although the community knows the politicians' life, it will be better if they recognize the personal via media which is has more extensive influenced.
Irfan, your stand in your introduction contradicts your stance in the conclusion. Somewhere along the line, you either forgot what your stance was, or you did not really make your stance clear enough in the introduction. I think you need to clarify that. After all, the introduction is the platform on which your essay will stand. I have read the prompt of this essay from other participants here so I need to point out a glaring error on your part. You need to pick one side. Either you believe in the media or you believe in the politicians. You can't believe in both at half points each. Either support it all the way or don't.
Reconsider the requirements of the prompt. Between the politicians and the media, who has the wider reach among audiences and who can easily help the audience form an opinion? Think about that and then decide who, due to the ease of access of the audience to the information, seems to have more influence in a public setting. Once you have made your choice, think about your personal reasons for supporting that choice and discuss it.
I will not review your current essay because I feel that you need to be given a second chance to properly write it. You need to analyze, revise, and make sure that your thoughts are at least expressed in a simple manner that can be easily understood. It does not have to be perfect grammar, it just has to at least show a coherent flow of thought on your part :-)
I look forward to reading your revision.
