Alright, I have noted that there are some comments on verbosity.
I have also noted that there have been some corrections on the opening lines.
Anyways, Liebe is here! ('Love' is here) ;)
My ideal vacation would be camping in the quit mountains of a state park or relaxing on the shore of a beautiful beach.
Although Ive been on five vacations,
out of those five
of them were are rememberable are memorable experiences
Two vacations I remember the
when my family and I rented an amazing little beach cabin in Rockport Texas
and as well as
when my friends and I took a trip to Garner State Park.
The first vacation
we took that meant so much to me
, that was meaningful to me,
was when I was 15 years old m
y parents and my sister and brother and I went on a family vacation in
; my parents, brother, sister and I went on a f
amily vacation to Rockport Texas.
The thing I well never forget
about this trip was
the beautiful view of the ocean from our cabin.
breath taking that the 3 of us kids fought over who go the bed next to the window.
^Three should be spelt out
I am not sure if breath taking is the correct word here. I am pretty sure that, given the context, it's use here is incorrect. Like, I would not say that just because three kids were fighting over whose bed is closest to the window is 'breath taking'. You can however, describe the scenery as 'breath taking'.
it wasn't just the ocean scenery that made this trip so special to me. It was also the time I spent alone relaxing on the screened
(?) in porch and most importantly the time I spent enjoying the company of my family.
It is kind of oxymoronic thta you enjoyed time alone, but most 'importantly', the time you spent with your family?
We there together a week and a half that summer with no TV or Internet,
making and made
I've never forgotten. I will never forget
The 2nd vacation I took was when I was seventeen.
^Are you talking about your second favorite vacation, or the second vacation you have ever taken. Earlier, you mentioned that you only remember two, which in turn would make the latter suggestion invalid, which would also imply that your essay has some fault in it....
Myself and nine of my closest friends and my best friends' dog," rascal ", went camping at Garner State park.'My nine friends, my best friend's dog "Rascal", and I went camping at Garner State Park.'
I'll that I will
never forget about this trip was the excitement of waking up every morning to the smell of breakfast cooking over an open fire. It was an amazing experience
live life without all the technology we have today!
what meant the most to me however wasn't
was not the smell of eggs and bacon but rather,
being having been
surrounded by the most extraordinary views of nature and wild life. We spent an entire day floating down the parks' beautiful river
enjoying and enjoyed
the scenery and each other's conversations. It was amazing to feel that close to each other and to the E
arth God created.
While my ideal vacation would be just a hike away from a cabin or a grain of sand away from a beach,
any vacation can be ideal
while ('if' or 'when')
those you love loved ones
That is why I will never forget my two favorite vacations and why I will continue to travel to those locations and enjoy my vacation time.
^By yourself or with your loved ones??
Isnt it ironic that we are talking about love and my user name is Liebe?