Ontheothadeerhand, professionals could be achieved their desired moneny by either donations or advertisement . they have oher opportunties like sponsership whereas students have no other way to fullfill their ambitons.
This line has a lot of typing mistakes....
On the other hand professionals could achieve their desired money by either donations or advertisements.They also have other opportunities like sponsorship whereas students have no other way to pursue their ambitions...
Moreover, Sachin Tendulkar is a "batsman" and not "batman"!
Also, there are many such typing mistakes and if you submit this essay, i am sure the admissions staff will go crazy( Sorry to sound rude!)
But I sincerely suggest you to rewrite this essay.