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Government should support student's or professional athelets ? Students!


alphy 3 / 10  
Dec 22, 2012   #1
Government has responsibility to support students as well as professionals for their sports activities , but in my point of view , it is essential to give more priority

for students as they are future pillers.

arts and sports should be mandatory to their school subjects .Because when they grow up physical education has significant role to maintain their physical
fitness . as the theoratical knowledge may help the child for mental wellbeing Moreover it will enhance the student's self esteem which may enable the,m to cope up with any situations when they grow up.and it could be their bread as well . for instance , sachin tendulkar , an indian batman .he has achieved , money a.nd pride.

on the same way ,extracurricular activities will strengthen the qualites of life such as team work and discipline and more . Most of the adolescents are suffering from stress due to hormonal changes it may turned to suicidal tendency but it could be avoided some extent through sports and arts activites. Even our children are suffering from obesity ,this is one of the worlds burning problems,if they practise physical activities from school life , we could overcome these problem.

Ontheothadeerhand, professionals could be achieved their desired moneny by either donations or advertisement . they have oher opportunties like sponsership whereas students have no other way to fullfill their ambitons.

To conclude, i strongly believe students are more deserve to get government's supports than professional athlets.
shailendra redd 4 / 8 2  
Dec 23, 2012   #2
Ontheothadeerhand, professionals could be achieved their desired moneny by either donations or advertisement . they have oher opportunties like sponsership whereas students have no other way to fullfill their ambitons.

This line has a lot of typing mistakes....
On the other hand professionals could achieve their desired money by either donations or advertisements.They also have other opportunities like sponsorship whereas students have no other way to pursue their ambitions...

Moreover, Sachin Tendulkar is a "batsman" and not "batman"!

Also, there are many such typing mistakes and if you submit this essay, i am sure the admissions staff will go crazy( Sorry to sound rude!)

But I sincerely suggest you to rewrite this essay.
joythblessy 86 / 272 15  
Dec 23, 2012   #3
Hai Alphy..
You have some good points..
But it didn't come out nicely..You have lots of spelling mistakes.
Careless writing...,(: without proper full stops or coma. Sentence, name, country name all should start using capital letters.
Your essay is difficult to understand because of inappropriate coma and full stop use.
Take simple topics as you are a biginner...
Read more essays..
If you send you mail id I will tell you something more..
Before posting the essay read at least twice..
Work har...der...
SORRY....if my comment is sharp...or hurt you...
All the best...
Tessy


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