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There are many arguments on study verses sports. As my opinion Universities should give the same amount of money to their students sports activities as they give to their university libraries.
There are many reasons I supports my opinion.
The main reason is student should be healthy. Student takes admission in university for study. They spend all the time for reading and researching. It has a impact on their health. In seating one place, students gets back pain. Watching and reading ebook on computer create eye's irritation and other eye's related problems. It is vital part in students life to stay healthy. If university provide all sports activities, then student can spend their spare time there.
Second reason is students economic condition. Some people believes that if student are interested in sport they should go in private club. All students economic condition are not same. Some students come from worst economic condition. They are already paying so much money for universities fees. Poor student can't spend money for sport. They can't go to private sport club for sport activities. To support all students and their interest university should spend money on both sport activities and library. I am from India and in India major collages and universities stress on study and provide facilities for study only. In my collage life, I was vary interested in sport but collage didn't have any sport activities . There were vary few private sport club and it was vary far. It was not possible for me to go to private sport club and spend money there. If I would have got a chance in sport activities may be I would have become a sports person now.
Third reason is university reputation. If university has huge library with sport activities, its definitely attraction for all student. Student don't want boring study life. They also want some entertainment with their on going carrier. If university has huge library and sports activities; it would be huge encouragement for collage admission. To make ideal university, university should give the same amount of money to their student sports activities as they give to their university libraries.
In conclusion, to make student healthy and reduce stress, university should encourage student or sport activities with studies, as providing money to sport activities as they give to their libraries.
THE first paragraph has already confused me and if I were reading a large amout of essays I would stop reading just after that.
There are many argument on study verses sports.(try instead- Sports vs. Study : The age old argument. Some (dont use some so much it makes you sound confused & confuses the reader) people thinks that students goes university for study not for time pass, so university should spend money on libraries instead of sports. (CHECK Grammar!) If student want to participate in sports, they should go private sport club. (State that this is others opinion and not your own)
If you ask my opinion I will (Unnessasary start sentence with I) i say that university (plural Universitys right?)should give the same amount of money to their sports activities as they give to their university libraries. (TRY using evenly distribute money to sports activity's) ....To support my belief I will illustrate in the following context.(This is your thesis. It is boring and too broad zoom in. What is the following context??)
Well, this is an interesting essay and i agree because i am a student athlete and i believe that universities give a lot of money to sports and not always as much to educational avenues. i would like to see a stronger begginning, because it goes right into your topic with no warning.give us, the audience a preview and time to understand what u r talking about, to brace ourselves for what to expect.
Thanks t1292
for suggestion.
Here everyone is in learning stage so don't expect vary interesting essay. I am also beginner and I am definitely improving my essay step by step.
There are many arguments on study verses sports. As In my opinion, Universities universities should give the same...
There are many reasons to support my opinion.
I get
she gets
you get
they get
While sitting in In seating one place, students get back pain.
eye-related
Watching television and reading ebooks on the computer create eye irritation and other eye-related problems.
Few clubs
One club
Many clubs
There were very few private sport clubs and...
The first reason
the second reason
The third reason is to improve the university's reputation.
This is very good, but keep practicing to make it perfect!
Thanks again Kelvin to realize my small-small mistake, which I have to check properly.
