It is clearly perceived in the contemporary world that there is a large gap between rich and poor countries. Moreover, it is important to note that the affluent nations are getting richer and the deprived nations are experiencing poverty that has yet to be alleviated.
This seems incomplete as an intro paragraph. In my opinion, it is good to add a sentence that contains the truth of the essay. Can you express the truth of the essay in a single sentence? Add that sentence to the end of the first paragraph.
As a demonstration of English language proficiency, this is so, so, so, excellent.
Well, at the risk of making a useless comment, your essay is perfect :D
ha ha... yeah, it really is a high quality essay.
By harnessing their workforce, the countries make it possible for their own money to circulate in their country instead of being poured out to richer nations in the process of hiring professionals abroad.
circulation in the country their money instead of, if they didn't have educated people, pouring it out to richer countries in which they would be hiring their profession and superior abilities This sentence was messed up.
I don't think it is good to say explicitly implies, because implicit and explicit are like opposites.
This
explicitly implies that more demand for
goods and services will be present.
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