IELTS TASK 2- Control the water usage is good to prevent a world disaster

As water is a valuable resource, governments all over the world should control how much water their citizens use?
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

People cannot live without water as water is an essential for human being. Some people argue governments all over the world should control the volume of citizen's water consumption. I agree this solution can give more advantage to the inhabitant than the demerit.

By controlling the amount of liquid was used by the inhabitants is the best way for the authorities to prevent from the limited of water, because water is difficult to be recovered in all place in this word. An excessive water used can reduce water spare on the earth, it not only affect local but also global and the effect is continuous drought. It can conclude that, all governments in this planet should control the usage of water to prevent world from limited water.

Although it is hard to control the water usage, it is no doubt is important to control the water consumption by everyone, people use water for domestic purpose, agriculture and industrial aims. It is impossible to form a border of water needs especially basic purpose for drink, cooking and hygiene. Therefore government should make a rule to cover this need. It is clear to say that to control the water consumption is hard to do but it is essential.

It can conclude that every government should control inhabitant's usage of water in order to prevent water supply although it is hard to do. Where possible, the authorities should fund the researches how to recovery the water sources all around the worlds, because drought in one region will affects other places.

Actually I think I had read this essay before and commented on it, friend!

Ester, my corrections are only focused on your introduction and conclusion paragraph. Those two parts are the most essential parts of IELTS writing. First impression is crucial to attract the interest of the reader, especially examiner. This is what public writing band descriptors of TASK 2 IELTS for task response of band 5 said:

- may make noticeable errors in spelling and/or word formation that may cause some difficulty for the reader

So, clarity is the king! Please remember that you should avoid to make your reader confuse by using a proper and understandable sentence(s).

Corrections:
- People cannot live without water as water is an essential for human being (perhaps you can avoid this redundancy by using synonym, or pronoun)
- ...volume of citizen'scitizens' water consumption.
- I firmly agree that, this solution can give more advantages to the inhabitant than the demeritdisadvantages .
- It can beconcludeconcluded that, (comma needed) every government should control inhabitant'sinhabitants' usage of water in order to prevent water supply from running out although it is hard to do.

- ...all around the worlds(world is only one, never try to make it plural again)

There you are Ester, Good luck for the next practice :)