With your opening, I see how you are trying to set the scene... better to ...
History class, last period
on Friday, and it was an unusual day, because no one was falling asleep.
Just my thought about it. Your way is cool...
I gasped, but he didn't notice me for he was too involved in his cell phone.
This part... I think the tone of the essay is more compatible with ...didn't notice me because he...
"What if t
hey catch you ?" I whispered nervously. "They won't.
Ha ha, this is very entertaining, and that goes a long way. You are charismatic.
Oh, I see good corrections by Tyler. Okay, try revisiting it and making it better. Make it the way that feels right to you.