DO NOT copy the topic.
Open the introduction with a motivator. The introduction should include four parts: 1) Motivator: Write an interesting statement. A motivator can be a "quotation", "question", "proverb", "statistic", "description", "short story". etc. 2) Thesis statement : reword the topic. 3) Write your opinion, 4) Blueprint
I base my opinion on the following points.
Do not use this statement. Try to briefly write the reasons why you agree or disagree with the topic. In this way, the reader can find out what issues are going to be discussed in the body. This is what is called "Blueprint".
First of all, I have to say that we have too much advertising on TV and mass media in nowadays. I overload our mind and attention. We look around and advertising is everywhere
What do u want to say? U started with adverting on TV. Then u said u were overloaded with ads, and finally u talked about the fact that advertising is everywhere. This style of writing may confuse the reader. Start each paragraph with a topic sentence. Each topic sentence includes two main parts: Limited subject and precise opinion. U should mention that what subject is going to be argued in the paragraph (limited subject). A precise opinion is an opinion about the limited subject.
Regards
Ahmad