There are many advantages if state cover whole cost of education and health systems for everyone

All education and healthcare should be funded by the government and free for everyone. to what extent do your agree or disagree?
Education and healthcare have been proving as the main factors of society welfare over the years. Therefore, every education and health system should be fully funded by state and make it free for society. I do believe that this would bring some positive impacts for several reasons.

The first benefit shows every people would get equal services especially in healthcare. As we know that, mostly developing countries have biggest gap issue between rich and poor family to get the same access equally since poor family have not sufficient money to pay the fee. However, a rich family usually gets better access to accept first service in hospital. Therefore, state needs fully cover cost in those fields to in order to make poor family and rich family have the same right to receive treatment.

Every school also has opportunity to improve their quality in several facilities. Despite of some issue private schools have better in quality than public schools, so fully number of subsidize increases the quality of public schools. For example, building library and adding various kinds of books.

In conclusion, there are many advantages if state cover whole cost in education and health systems.

Hi Desty, your writing is good enough. Please let me give another suggestions for you.

You have to make sure that you paraphrase the question and give your thesis statement well. Your first sentence close enough to be one of your view than paraphrasing. I will give you an example for the introduction:

Some people argue that the government has to discharge the education and health care costs for all citizens. I firmly believe that the country will receive some positive impact if the policy is applied.

As we knowIt has become a common knowledge that, mostly developing countries have a biggest gap issue between the rich and poor family

state needs to fully cover cost in those fields to in order to make poor family and rich family have the same right to receive treatment.

In your third paragraph, you haven't explained your example by giving the result for it. It can make your paragraph less strong. A good and strong paragraph must consist of: main idea, reason, example and result of the example.

Writing task 2 in IELTS is tricky. You have to make a good and clear brainstorming before writing your essay. It will help you a lot in making your essay stronger.

I hope my suggestions will be helpful for you. Keep writing :)