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Actions speak louder than words. TOEFL ibt writing


mywill 4 / 10  
May 18, 2011   #1
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Actions speak louder than words.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your response.
In our daily life, actions and words are both reactions to any situation. Sometimes it is better to act but it is wiser to have a word with someone in some cases. There are many concepts about this saying, so what is better of all: actions or words?

People in favor of acting seem to feel like nothing can be done with having a mouth open. They think men had better act but ought not to be as talkative as women since this will have an impact on the strength and personality of a real man. Actions indeed make the surroundings admire you. For example, when come up with a robber or an murder , does persuasion really help you catch the stealer or save your life from the killer? Definitely not, so we have act in time to get a meaningful action.

On the other hand, some disagree that actions do not actually bring a matter to a happy ending. In some circumstances, for instance, when in a row with your best friend, what should you do get better off? Use your power to stop it or sit down and talk peacefully with yours? The latter one will be the smart choice because of your best friend, you can not treat like a gangster or a kidnapper. Words are really helpful if we know how to and when to use.

To sum up, I think if we solve a problem with a separate way: talking and acting, things will not be looking up. In fact, we had better try to apply actions and word in line and that will truly do because you become a skillful person who can get control of the situation and can get the matter out of your life perfectly, which is really a happy ending.

I see an example of this topic but it is not about TOEFL ibt. Please help me out blow out the mistake.
Thanks all
jamesyl 1 / 1  
May 18, 2011   #2
Well, first of all. I don't think it a good idea to say women are more usually "talkative" than men. BTW, you can use the word "voluble" instead of "talkative", which refers to talking a lot.

"when come up with a robber or an murder , does persuasion..."
When you come across a robber...

"we have act in time to get a meaningful action."
We should sometimes act immediately when bad things happen

I think you did a great job in this essay, with slight traces of mistakes. You have a good control of English phrases, and you get your points across clearly. To score higher in the real TOEFL test, you may probably add 1 or 2 more supporting ideas. Good luck to your test! :D
OP mywill 4 / 10  
May 20, 2011   #3
thank you. I'll try
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
May 20, 2011   #4
In our daily life, actions and words are both reactions to any situation. Sometimes it is better to act but it is wiser to have a word with someone in some cases. There are many concepts about this saying, so what is better best of all: actions or words?

People in favor of acting seem to feel like nothing can be done with having a mouth open. by simply opening the mouth and speaking. They think men had better ...

Words are really helpful if we know how to and when to use them.

To sum up, I think if we we can solve a problem with a separate way: talking and acting, things will not be looking up. things will be looking up.

:-)


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