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|Zoo has no useful purpose. Do you agree or disagree?
3 - Hi nil ! I think for these kind of essay topics, you are suppose to pick a side. If you...
Writing Feedbacknil - Aug 31, 2015 / Samuelsam123 - Aug 31, 2015
|Without parents assistance children can easily be affected by bad habits, lifestyle and cultures
8 - This essay is well done. You have an intro conclusion and three body paragraphs. final tests, However... The correct...
Writing Feedbacknguyenthiet1993 - Aug 16, 2015 / EF_Carol - Aug 31, 2015
|IELTS essay: Age limit for retirement is 50 in some countires and 65 to 70 in others
4 - This is my little tip for IELTS writing. The task2 should be over 250 words. And as repeated words could not...
Writing FeedbackBalajiskb - Aug 25, 2015 / tk0308 - Aug 31, 2015
|A remote village brings the kind people, inexpensive, healthy food can be consumed in a countryside
3 - This intro (first paragraph) is too complicated. It is always good to keep your paragraph succinct and to the point. Let me...
Writing FeedbackBayuwibowo - Aug 30, 2015 / eddies - Aug 30, 2015
|Essay: Travelling & Tourism - if you don't afraid to take the risk then go ahead
2 - I can help you with your essay. 1st paragraph: Some people may see the positive side of travelling to somewhere...
Writing FeedbackNamisaChan - Aug 28, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 30, 2015
|Relationship should be for eternity - nothing else in this world can last forever
2 - I would like to help you with some of your essay. I will focus on two paragraphs. There are some missing...
Writing Feedbackseasee - Aug 28, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 29, 2015
|Transport by a train, airplane, underground, coach, bicycle, motorcycle, etc. should be encouraged
4 - Hello, I will answer your questions. When you used "such as" you needed to use the word the. I will try...
Writing Feedbackhayaalqasem - Aug 29, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 29, 2015
|It is better if advertisements would not be allowed directed toward children
2 - errors comments typo errors Raising a child is a challengedchallenging task in all ages but at ages of 2 between between 2...
Writing Feedbackoblivionfire - Aug 28, 2015 / NamisaChan - Aug 28, 2015
|Agree or disagree: Educations nowadays is more difficult than in the past
2 - Here are my suggestions: As usual, whether or not Determining whether education educations nowadays is more difficult now than in...
Writing Feedbackvahid5570 - Aug 28, 2015 / ChristineB - Aug 28, 2015
|Living up to the accustomed standard -Cbest writing practice essay
3 - I would like to help you with some of your essay. I can focus on sentence variety, meaning, and word...
Writing Feedbackreddlegg99 - Aug 28, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 28, 2015
|Do you agree or disagree that advertising serves no purpose for the society and should be banned?
4 - Advertising is a means of marketing strategy. That's my point of view....
Writing Feedbacksinanju - Aug 26, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 28, 2015
|An example of my leadership TTU scholarship
2 - 1st paragraph: I think you should be more specific when you begin your essay. Here is a suggestion: "Throughout high school, I...
Writing FeedbackAubreythefruit - Aug 26, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 27, 2015
|SAT Essay: good decisions vs. bad decisions
2 - I would like to help you with your thesis and word choice in this essay. First, I would like to...
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Aug 27, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 27, 2015
|Is better to travel in their own country than in foreign countries
2 - "Most of people love traveling to other countries and even within their own country, and it. Travelling is really important in people...
Writing Feedbackminutespele - Aug 27, 2015 / szhang25 - Aug 27, 2015
|Universe exploration projects - these are a waste of money and all the funds should be spent better
2 - Your writing is well done, but needs some help! secondly,, funds... You should call this a new paragraph...
Writing Feedbackorbital188 - Aug 27, 2015 / EF_Carol - Aug 27, 2015
|Why a company which build a large factory near my community gets my support? TOEFL essay
3 - I suggest checking the spellings, since some errors as for the issues are here and there. Also, the intro needs a slight...
Writing Feedbacknguyenthiet1993 - Aug 27, 2015 / eddies - Aug 27, 2015
|GRE essay. Art is not meaningless and the governments should support it
2 - For long time,→ For a long time, I claim that, the government's support... → I claim that the government's support... financial resourses...
Writing Feedbackey1011 - Aug 26, 2015 / orbital188 - Aug 27, 2015
|Hard work keeps us determined towards our destiny, the luck alone is not enough to succeed.
2 - in your second paragraph, "determined" doesn't feel like the right word. " It prevents us from being an aimlessness" should...
Writing Feedbackmakr - Aug 26, 2015 / Aubreythefruit - Aug 26, 2015
|[Toefl] extended family continue importance
2 - Besides that, today face-to-face meeting was is affordable because airplane trips were are cheaper....
Writing Feedbacktakerisk - Aug 26, 2015 / makr - Aug 26, 2015
|SAT Essay: Are people defined by their occupations?
2 - I can help you again. I will try to focus on your thesis. The first paragraph, I would suggest "eat...
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Aug 26, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 26, 2015
|Successful people are willing to examine new things and take risks - they can't accept routine
2 - I would like to help you with your essay. I would like to give you some suggestions for the first paragraph....
Writing Feedbackmsaleh - Aug 26, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 26, 2015
|[TOEFL] Internet provides a lot of information and it is positive
4 - Your 1st reason says internet make search easier and cheaper. But you didnt explain how cheaper?...
Writing Feedbackjoao_carlos - Aug 19, 2015 / makr - Aug 26, 2015
|Toefl Essays; Students can get some specific jobs only if they study science and mathematics
2 - more important for several reasons One of the most important reasons is that In my opinion/ I...
Writing Feedbackmakr - Aug 25, 2015 / joao_carlos - Aug 26, 2015
|The internet has transformed, but is still causing newer and newer problems
3 - dear. Henr247 thanks for your feedback. I accept your advice. . ....
Writing Feedbackbany1020 - Aug 25, 2015 / bany1020 - Aug 26, 2015
|SAT Essay: Do people view things from the same perspective?
5 - Your ideas are concise , however, I would try to correct some of the grammar mistakes that are located in your...
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Aug 24, 2015 / Henr247 - Aug 25, 2015
|TOEFL: Building a new cinema in the neighborhood is beneficial.
2 - I cannot score your essay, but here are a few recommendations: In fact, building My neighborhood has been grappling with...
Writing Feedbackeegii012 - Aug 25, 2015 / ChristineB - Aug 25, 2015
|'People should give up their cars to save the earth.' Do you agree or disagree?
4 - Thanks everyone for your correction. Really appreciate....
Writing FeedbackEric2750230 - Aug 24, 2015 / Eric2750230 - Aug 25, 2015
|[Toefl] Games are good to improve cognitive abilities.
6 - Its a well writteen essay, you need some more practice in order to achieve desired results!!!...
Writing Feedbackosvaldo_o - Aug 21, 2015 / fahad_a11 - Aug 25, 2015
|Family and society must regulate and manage children's computers usage to avoid negative impact.
5 - This introduction needs a slight improvement. Here it is: Computer plays a pivotal role in children's lives these days, and it...
Writing Feedbackhayaalqasem - Aug 22, 2015 / shintacandrade - Aug 24, 2015
|Computer game destroys traditional game
3 - Your introduction is quite good, but it needs a slight improvement. As such, allow me to rewrite this part: Technology has...
Writing Feedbackfaarasyad - Aug 23, 2015 / shintacandrade - Aug 23, 2015
|SAT Essay: Are heroes those who speak up when others lack the courage?
3 - I think your essay has a strong intro and conclusion. You seem to answer the question well! when others lack...
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Aug 16, 2015 / EF_Carol - Aug 23, 2015
|[TOEFL] Online Games, Good or Bad?
3 - Hi! Here is my corrections for you. The past decade has witnessed the rapid progress of online games. Is it a...
Writing FeedbackWeed - Aug 22, 2015 / eegii012 - Aug 23, 2015
|What other skill(s) should schools focus on to prepare students for the workplace?
3 - Hi Greenw4y2, I think another skill that schools should be focused on preparing students for the workplace is communication skill. The...
Writing Feedbackgreenw4y2 - Aug 19, 2015 / faarasyad - Aug 22, 2015
|She is strict but lovely. MY FAVOURITE TEACHER
3 - Hi Shancklm, I suggest you to write the question completely so that the readers can give meaningful feedback for your writing....
Writing Feedbackshancklm - Aug 22, 2015 / faarasyad - Aug 22, 2015
|TOEFL - 'colleges and universities provide the best conditions for students to gain knowledge'
4 - you get a big thank from me. eddies and eegii012...
Writing Feedbacknguyenthiet1993 - Aug 21, 2015 / nguyenthiet1993 - Aug 22, 2015
|Children are less creative than 10 years ago due to technology
5 - Thanks Aubreythefruit. Your comments were really useful to me. By the way, my native language is portuguese, which derivate from spanish. Similarly...
Writing FeedbackLuxemburgo_T - Aug 21, 2015 / Luxemburgo_T - Aug 22, 2015
|Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. A/D
3 - I can help you with your essay. I would like to help you with word choice and give you some suggestions. ...
Writing Feedbackraman123 - Aug 21, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 22, 2015
|[GRE] Essay on true leadership - demands alone do not create true leaders.
2 - hi Rose jh88 your essay is very good but there is one note in the introduction you should specify if...
Writing Feedbackrosejh88 - Aug 21, 2015 / hayaalqasem - Aug 22, 2015
|More experts migrate from developing to developed countries for better vacancies in technical fields
2 - Hi Hung I think the introduction need some improvements I will try to do that Majority of qualified and skilled people migrate...
Writing FeedbackHung - Aug 22, 2015 / hayaalqasem - Aug 22, 2015
|Why is physical education important? Should physical education classes be required or optional?
5 - Thank you so much for giving me such valuable advises and i am not familiar with the academic writing style so the...
Writing Feedbackgroundzero1997 - Aug 19, 2015 / groundzero1997 - Aug 21, 2015
|It is primarily through our identification with social groups that we define ourselves.
2 - People work in the room and innovate such a good invention which change the life of people and give an identity to...
Writing FeedbackJunisha111p - Aug 21, 2015 / beckybob2009 - Aug 21, 2015
|TOEFL: Car usage in 20 years later
2 - The issue of how many cars will be in use has been a controversy for many people. Since people do act by...
Writing Feedbackeegii012 - Aug 21, 2015 / minoosaba - Aug 21, 2015
|Students need enough time for adaptation in a new environment abroad
5 - As the word is changing, option for study, even high school, are changing. Most of them are want to push their...
Writing Feedbackfaarasyad - Aug 20, 2015 / Junisha111p - Aug 21, 2015
|'a perfect balance' - Country must invest equally of art and military.
2 - Here are my suggestions: The military Military and the arts art are the two different but most vital part components...
Writing FeedbackJunisha111p - Aug 19, 2015 / ChristineB - Aug 20, 2015
|What makes us survive is not because the life never getting easier, yet we are getting stronger.
5 - There are still some errors but the meaning is becoming clearer. I will focus on the 4th paragraph but help you with...
Writing Feedbackmasktaz - Aug 17, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 20, 2015
|Fatherless Families: The Negative Effect on Children
3 - When you begin the 4th paragraph, you should describe why fathers are the most untouched resource. This statement can be confusing because...
Writing Feedbacksimonedonae - Aug 19, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 19, 2015
|The Olympic Games still play a vital role in today's modern time - IELTS
2 - I am not really sure that if my suggestions below are correct, but in China teachers always tell students that write this...
Writing Feedbackjaypatel - Aug 19, 2015 / RYAN KNIGHT - Aug 19, 2015
|Books are more significant than experience, but we can't live apart from it.
4 - Your essay is well written, but could benefit from some development. the most important source... Your intro should mention the...
Writing Feedbackhayaalqasem - Aug 15, 2015 / EF_Carol - Aug 19, 2015
|SAT Essay: Are creativity and originality necessary for success?
3 - Of course, we need both creativity as well as originality while doing every work. Essay is good, but you could have...
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Aug 17, 2015 / ednashirley - Aug 19, 2015
|Parents should care about their children's education - challenging point
4 - Hi Vahid, I like your question as well as essay. Parents should care about their children. not only in the case...
Writing Feedbackvahid5570 - Aug 18, 2015 / ednashirley - Aug 19, 2015
|People should not get their knowledge from unlimited resources to gain necessary information
2 - Hi atuosa, It is better if you write the question completely so that the readers can give meaningful feedback for...
Writing Feedbackatousa8792 - Aug 17, 2015 / shintacandrade - Aug 18, 2015
|"Can acting in one's own self interest make the world a better place?" SAT Essay
2 - I would like to help you with your essay. When I read the introduction, I thought there were few mistakes in you...
Writing FeedbackSunset7 - Aug 17, 2015 / lcturn87 - Aug 17, 2015
|TOEFL:The longer one lives with parents, the better the one will be.
3 - As the opening sentence, this phrase is too long. Therefore, it is always good to write no more than 10 words...
Writing Feedbackeegii012 - Aug 17, 2015 / eddies - Aug 17, 2015
|WHY DO YOUNG PEOPLE LIKE TO LIVE IN BIG CITIES? IELTS ESSAY
7 - thank you very much...
Writing Feedbacknguyenthiet1993 - Jul 21, 2015 / nguyenthiet1993 - Aug 16, 2015
|Modern lifestyle has made it harder for people to live a healthy, active lifestyle. Causes&Solutions
5 - Thank you for your valuable advice....
Writing Feedbackshiravin - Aug 12, 2015 / shiravin - Aug 16, 2015
|The rate of using internet between urban/suburban regions tended to increase rapidly over time.
3 - - ..the rate of using internet between two regions tended to increase.. - After that, the rate has more slightly risen,...
Writing FeedbackRon Weasley - Aug 6, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 15, 2015
|SAT Essay: Should we weigh opinions equally or put more weight on informed opinions?
3 - - The upshot is scores of Americans rushing - ....started once the excitements fades. - The Ignorance from this causes...
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Aug 4, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 15, 2015
|SAT Essay: Are rewards harmful motivators?
3 - - In the fast-paced age of the milleniummillennium ( be careful with spelling, turn on spell checker) generation,... - Yet every week,...
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Aug 3, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 15, 2015
|SAT Essay: Are all heroes eventually forgotten?
2 - Hey there, I would like to give you some correction that you might considered. here are some typos Greek...
Writing Feedbackszhang25 - Aug 13, 2015 / masktaz - Aug 15, 2015
|Write a story about two children who leave their old home and start a new life in a new one.
3 - - ....fearing that the worst hadhas yet to come. - 'We are going travellingto travel! ' -... Adam and his...
Writing FeedbackSamilijah - Aug 3, 2015 / justivy03 - Aug 15, 2015
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