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IELTS TASK 2- Newspapers have an enormous influence on people's ideas and opinions.

3 - Hi Garth, I would like to share additional insights to your essay and, yes, WELCOME to Essay Forum. 1st paragraph -...

Writing Feedbacktruebypass - Apr 11, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 14, 2016
IELTS TASK 2- Control the water usage is good to prevent a world disaster

4 - Ester, my corrections are only focused on your introduction and conclusion paragraph. Those two parts are the most essential parts of IELTS...

Writing FeedbackEster Napitupulu - Apr 11, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Apr 14, 2016
The greatest changes of an attractive island by maximize some novel facilities to improve tourism

3 - Hi Ester, below are a few additional modifications from my end. - atin the island - by maximizing some...

Writing FeedbackEster Napitupulu - Apr 11, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 14, 2016
Global Population Growth from 1800 and Urban Populations Prediction until 2100 - 3 centuries period

2 - Hi Ester, here's a little help from my end. - inthe inner city in - andthis were measured ...

Writing FeedbackEster Napitupulu - Apr 11, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 11, 2016
Before bricks can be used by a builder, they must be in the drying oven for 24 until 48 hours

2 - Hi Baso, it seemed as though you have a lot of projects today. Anyway, please find my suggestions below and I hope...

Writing FeedbackLa Baso - Apr 11, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 11, 2016
Before sending directly to houses the rainwater must be in the treatment plant for purifying process

2 - Hi Baso, here's another help from my end. - This diagram presents about the - ways of reusing rainwater, such...

Writing FeedbackLa Baso - Apr 11, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 11, 2016
Australian family's monthly expenditure on food, clothing, transport, electricity and water

3 - Hi Ester Napitupulu Your essay is complete and understandable.but i think you should use more complex sentences to enrich your essay...

Writing FeedbackEster Napitupulu - Apr 11, 2016 / suxiaojing - Apr 11, 2016
Business & money - recruiting workers important for a company (ielts task 2)

7 - HI Wira, I was looking forward to review you revised essay but it seems as though your taking some time, this is...

Writing Feedbackaviniwirastri - Apr 6, 2016 / justivy03 - Apr 11, 2016
IELTS TASK 2: It is commonly believed that education is of vital importance...

6 - Hii writer, here are my suggestion for you : to effectively achieve its purposes ==> to achieve its purpose effectively ...

Writing Feedbacksuxiaojing - Apr 10, 2016 / Ester Napitupulu - Apr 11, 2016
Children are in workplace, two views of this case.

4 - are more reliant in mange manage their money and it taught give the children a lesson how to work hard and...

Writing FeedbackWiwik Mujahidin - Apr 3, 2016 / Ester Napitupulu - Apr 11, 2016
The international trade make people utilize the all things from other country.

5 - Hi wiwik.. Here some my suggestion for you There are Mmany disadvantages of international commerce its can make cause...

Writing FeedbackWiwik Mujahidin - Apr 3, 2016 / Ester Napitupulu - Apr 11, 2016
The sophistecated technology make people's lives change

4 - The sophisticated technology make people's lives change in their daylydaily routinely. ==> better you use activities lifestyle of people's lifestyle ...

Writing FeedbackWiwik Mujahidin - Apr 10, 2016 / Ester Napitupulu - Apr 11, 2016
IELTS TASK 2: Providing the accomodation quickly and cheaply

3 - They always should concern on the quality of the accommodation. ==> better you use should, because quality is a must It...

Writing FeedbackAnaguna - Apr 10, 2016 / Ester Napitupulu - Apr 11, 2016
IELTS Task 2, In this modern era, smoking is more than lifestyle

4 - Smoking can make affect not only the smoker becoming getting sick but also those who staying near close to them it...

Writing Feedbackwahyu - Apr 3, 2016 / Ester Napitupulu - Apr 11, 2016
IELTS TASK 2. The people's low interest of walking

3 - dear writer but in this era, (needed come) only a few do people realize this. There are...

Writing Feedbacknelarizka79 - Apr 3, 2016 / La Baso - Apr 11, 2016
IELTS TEST 2: How people will become happy with money or another factor

6 - dear writer, allow me to give little opinion I have read you conclusion In conclusion, although the money can control ......

Writing FeedbackAnaguna - Apr 3, 2016 / La Baso - Apr 11, 2016
The global population is predicted to rise dramatically in 2040 and to drop steadily in 2100. IELTS

3 - thank you so much :) I will try my best...

Writing FeedbackLa Baso - Apr 11, 2016 / La Baso - Apr 11, 2016
IELTS WRITING TASK 1: The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton

3 - Thank you :)...

Writing FeedbackLa Baso - Apr 11, 2016 / La Baso - Apr 11, 2016
Water is a valuable resource for human and government has to control the water usage

5 - Dear writer. allow me to give little opinion Water is the source of the living and it is a valuable source...

Writing FeedbackWiwik Mujahidin - Apr 10, 2016 / La Baso - Apr 11, 2016
IELTS writing Task 2 : High Education or Work Experience - there are several opinions

3 - Dear writer, try to avoid use same connector or contrast word better if you say On the other hand However/In...

Writing Feedbackliv_ryu - Apr 10, 2016 / La Baso - Apr 11, 2016
IELTS TASK 2 - Traveling to many different places makes you more sophisticated

6 - Merged: Holidaying in new tourist destination is more useful [...]...

Writing FeedbackEster Napitupulu - Apr 6, 2016 / Ester Napitupulu - Apr 11, 2016
Throughout the history, the damage that human caused to the mother nature is irreversible.

4 - Thanks for all suggestions :D Now I know what to do to complete my essay. Love you guys :D...

Writing FeedbackTedd - Apr 10, 2016 / Tedd - Apr 11, 2016
The accommodation is important for people to undertake they daily routines

5 - Housing are important for people to ... Some people say that buildings such as apartment and homes should be designed to get...

Writing FeedbackWiwik Mujahidin - Apr 10, 2016 / nelarizka79 - Apr 11, 2016
IELTS TASK 2. Free tuition fee and healthcare fee for everyone

3 - hi.... Despite all of the possible negative impact, this will benefitshumans being in several ways. what do you mean by benefits? if...

Writing Feedbacknelarizka79 - Apr 3, 2016 / La Baso - Apr 11, 2016
Although the Internet makes finding an information easy, sometimes it can not be 100% true.

7 - Hello friends , I rewrite my essay avoided the mistake as much as I can . I understand that I've mistakes in...

Writing Feedbacksalam97 - Apr 9, 2016 / salam97 - Apr 10, 2016
Making bricks process. First, the clays that are served in a nature are scrapped by the digger.

2 - the bricks must be drying DRIED and cooling COOLED . Next, the bricks are coolingLED in the cooling chamber and then...

Writing FeedbackAnaguna - Apr 10, 2016 / ainirere - Apr 10, 2016
The diagrams presents the changes that have occurred in Queen Mary Hospital since its building

4 - This is my suggestion for you The diagram illustrates the improvement construction the Queen Mary Hospital between 1960 and 2000. Overall, it...

Writing FeedbackWiwik Mujahidin - Apr 10, 2016 / dina79 - Apr 10, 2016
The diagram presents the process that is used to produce bricks to construct a building

2 - Overall, it can be seen that, NO COMMA the method of production are complex ... First, the clay are IS dug...

Writing FeedbackWiwik Mujahidin - Apr 10, 2016 / Masfufah - Apr 10, 2016
IELTS TASK 2: Water as a valuable resources in the worldwide

3 - I would argue that it is a wise step in which will sustain the water source. people have to use the water...

Writing FeedbackAnaguna - Apr 10, 2016 / Wiwik Mujahidin - Apr 10, 2016
Smoking is Littering - this habit should be limited in public areas. IELTS Taks 2

6 - It Smokehas become debatable for smoking case in the public areas and almost the great number the majority of people believe...

Writing FeedbackANSOR99 - Apr 2, 2016 / Wiwik Mujahidin - Apr 10, 2016
Some people believe that learners should attend a college by their eagerness to a certain subject

5 - Popular (popular is not appropriate here) some people believe that learner (...) acceptable for studying some subjects which is are (be aware...

Writing FeedbackAnaguna - Apr 10, 2016 / Masfufah - Apr 10, 2016
Manufacturing Tea: only 2 top leaves and bud are picked in order to guarantee the good tea's quality

5 - Hai, Liv.. Here I give you alternative sentence for the second paragraph. At first, the tea picker just takes the tea...

Writing Feedbackliv_ryu - Apr 7, 2016 / Anaguna - Apr 10, 2016
IELTS TASK 1: (Chart) Information about global population and distribution of Wealth

8 - The chart gives information about showscomparison between international population number in various countries of the world with the distribution of affluence in...

Writing FeedbackDiandin16 - Apr 8, 2016 / Wiwik Mujahidin - Apr 10, 2016
'electricity cost increase' - Some alteration in Australian monthly expenditure in 1991 and 2001

5 - The table shows an average monthly family expenses in Australia in 1991 and 2001 from 1991 to 2001 and is measured...

Writing FeedbackEster Napitupulu - Apr 5, 2016 / Wiwik Mujahidin - Apr 10, 2016
IELTS TASK : Passenger railway journeys made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004/5.

5 - The National network was a rank first as the favourite transportation the first rank While the London Underground in the second...

Writing Feedbackdina79 - Apr 10, 2016 / aviniwirastri - Apr 10, 2016
IELTS task 1: Market share of the mobile phone market for manufactures presented in the table

6 - Hi Dina79, Let me check your essay At the first introduction you should explain about the graph what it explains about....

Writing Feedbackdina79 - Apr 9, 2016 / Masfufah - Apr 10, 2016
The cutting-edge technology has led media to more accessible in individuals' lives.

6 - Hello Liv, your essay is good however I try to paraphrase your sentences in the second paragraph. Secondly, easy access offered...

Writing Feedbackliv_ryu - Apr 6, 2016 / Anaguna - Apr 10, 2016
IELTS TASK 1: The circulation of rainwater in the environment

2 - Hi anaguna, let me check your essay. The figure illustrates the process of reusing of rainwater the circulation of rainwater from...

Writing FeedbackAnaguna - Apr 10, 2016 / Masfufah - Apr 10, 2016
The changes of buildings construction in the Queen Mary Hospital alongside the main road (1960-2000)

2 - Hi Anaguna, Let me check your essay ! Overall, The most noticeable change is (please be aware of the time, in...

Writing FeedbackAnaguna - Apr 10, 2016 / Masfufah - Apr 10, 2016
IELTS TASK 2 - Global trade is important to fulfill people's need

4 - Currently, International trade has increased. ... which are not found in this countries far eclipse any drawbacks, the benefit outweigh...

Writing FeedbackEster Napitupulu - Apr 3, 2016 / Wiwik Mujahidin - Apr 10, 2016
The majors are important to support the ability of student when they look a job. Forced subjects.

3 - Hi wiwik, I just give you an example to make your sentences clearer. It means people who take subjects in university...

Writing FeedbackWiwik Mujahidin - Apr 10, 2016 / Anaguna - Apr 10, 2016
IELTS Task 1, Viewers watch the channels One News - the line graph conclusions

2 - A breakdown of the number of viewers who watch the a channels One News (the channel just one, do not add up...

Writing Feedbackwahyu - Apr 10, 2016 / Masfufah - Apr 10, 2016
Changes in expenses of an average Australian family between 1991 and 2001, measured in US dollars

3 - ... the spending of an average Australian family was higher in 2001 than 1991, 715 and 675 per month respectively. In...

Writing FeedbackMasfufah - Apr 10, 2016 / Wiwik Mujahidin - Apr 10, 2016
The natural water from rain is important for consuming by the myriad of people. How is it reused?

5 - Hi Dina, here I suggest an introduction in your essay. hope you can improve your writing skill. The diagram presents...

Writing Feedbackdina79 - Apr 8, 2016 / Anaguna - Apr 10, 2016
IELTS TASK 2: The effect of electronic invention such as the computer and the television

3 - Health is an essential part of human life. Health is an essential thing that people have to sustain (if possible do not...

Writing FeedbackAnaguna - Apr 10, 2016 / Masfufah - Apr 10, 2016
The growth of population in the worldwide over 3-centuries period / number of the urban community

4 - ... the bar chart illustrates the number of the urban community population in both developed and developing areas spread ... Overall, the...

Writing FeedbackAnaguna - Apr 10, 2016 / Wiwik Mujahidin - Apr 10, 2016
The line chart shows the number of growth population in the worldwide from over a 300-years period

3 - According to the first graph, to begin the number of global population stood at 1000 in 1800, afterwards Then, it experienced a...

Writing FeedbackMasfufah - Apr 10, 2016 / Wiwik Mujahidin - Apr 10, 2016
An info about vehicles utilizing in Edmonton and some society reasons for using a car in the town.

5 - Hello wiwik, here my suggestion for your introduction: The pie chart presents the information about vehicles utilize in ... "The...

Writing FeedbackWiwik Mujahidin - Apr 6, 2016 / Anaguna - Apr 10, 2016
Young People Have Little Leisure Time (Causes and Solutions) The new obligation for young generation

5 - Hi liv, your essay is good however you still need more narrowly the ideas of the topic; please give a reasonable example...

Writing Feedbackliv_ryu - Apr 7, 2016 / Anaguna - Apr 10, 2016
The proper age of children to enrol formal education

3 - Undoubtedly, children aged four show they have excellent skills to learn and ... ... kids to receive lessons easily because their brain...

Writing Feedbacktiraatira11 - Apr 1, 2016 / Masfufah - Apr 10, 2016
The percentage of the movies played and the theater visitors in both UK and Australia

3 - Hi Nelarizka79, there are so many correction for you, I hope that I can help you: 1. you have to know...

Writing Feedbacknelarizka79 - Mar 14, 2016 / liv_ryu - Apr 10, 2016
The figure of four different features were mostly interested in 2003 and 2013

4 - Let me give some suggestions: 1. I am sorry before, but your essay is not required since you are not complete in...

Writing Feedbacknelarizka79 - Mar 15, 2016 / liv_ryu - Apr 10, 2016
The alteration of America's Appearance in 1948 and 2010

6 - Let me give some suggestions: 1. Before you submit you essay, make sure that you have enough words to answer on IELTS...

Writing Feedbacknelarizka79 - Mar 17, 2016 / liv_ryu - Apr 10, 2016
IELTS TASK 1. Four places visited by three different people migrants living in Australia

3 - Hi Nelarizka79, I am sorry before that I cannot open your picture, so I only give the suggestion based on your words. ...

Writing Feedbacknelarizka79 - Apr 3, 2016 / liv_ryu - Apr 10, 2016
IELTS TASK 2. The scarcity issue of natural resources experience significant increasing year by year

4 - Hi Nelarizka, here my corrections for you in introduction : In the era of global warming era, the scarcity issue of...

Writing Feedbacknelarizka79 - Apr 7, 2016 / liv_ryu - Apr 10, 2016
IELTS TASK 1: Australian family expenditures in 1991 and 2001

3 - Hi Anaguna, here some corrections: 1. it will be repetition if you always mention dollars almost in every sentence. Actually, you...

Writing FeedbackAnaguna - Apr 4, 2016 / liv_ryu - Apr 10, 2016
IELTS TASK 1: The most popular transportation in Edmonton - cars and Light Rail Transit

4 - Hi Anaguna, some sentence seem well-organize. Yet, i have some suggestion : 1. firstly, your introduction is clearly enough that you mentioned...

Writing FeedbackAnaguna - Apr 7, 2016 / liv_ryu - Apr 10, 2016
The Lack of local people visitors to museum

4 - Hi, Bastian20. here my comments and suggestion for your essay. keep writing dude. at first, i'll say that based on...

Writing Feedbackbastian20 - Apr 9, 2016 / RAY93 - Apr 10, 2016
The table illustrates the total students as Initial Teacher Training (ITT) candidates based on sexes

2 - Lily, perhaps your next move is to avoid some repetitions in your essay by using some synonyms and do some paraphrases. Now,...

Writing Feedbackliv_ryu - Apr 9, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Apr 9, 2016
IELTS writing Task 1 : Worldwide Market Share of Mobile Phone Market in The Years 2005 and 2006

2 - Lily, I reckon that your writing is getting better. I notice some improvements here. Yet, you accidentally still created only 2 sentences...

Writing Feedbackliv_ryu - Apr 9, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Apr 9, 2016

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