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Young people should prefer living in the city.


gowerdhan786 2 / -  
Mar 18, 2011   #1
According to my opinion young people should prefer living in city because of the many reason. Lets take an example of a young couple who wants to start a new job and new family together. Starting professional life and family life would be easier in city as compared to rural area because of the following reasons:-

Plenty of jobs available in the city: As there are plenty of jobs available in the city it will be easier for them to find a suitable job. But in rural area there are very few jobs.

More social life: As we can see that city is full of other people around it will be easier for the couple to make new friends. They can even find some good neighbor s and become friends. Where as in rural area it is very rare that you can find people to even talk.

Convenient to commute: In the city there are plenty of places where you can go just by walking, there is no need of parking a car.

Public transportation: As I have seen, there are plenty of options available in the city to commute like Bus, Trains, Subways . By using cheap public transport a new couple can save lots money which they would have wasted if they have used there own vehical to go here and there.

Closer to events happening in city:- I believe that City is the most happening place to live because many concerts and events happens in the city which you would like to attend on a regular basis. Whereas if you live in suburb you will have travel to the city to attend the event, which is again a time consuming thing to do.

More time for kids and family:- By living in the city you will not have travel much as you will be near to you job and the time saved you can give to your kids and family.

Good opportunity education:- Later on when there kids grow up they will have more and better educational institutions in the city as compared to suburb.

Good facilities like Mall, medical, Market:- City is full of shopping malls, Medical centers which you can take benefits of.
But for the retired people I would suggest that they should prefer living in the rural area because they have easy going life style in the rural area. Because they don't have to worry about jobs since they are retired, They can just sit back relax in quietness of rural area. They are retired so they don't have to commute here and their that as compared to the young families.
KathyLala 20 / 116  
Mar 22, 2011   #2
It appears to me your writing is an outline rather than a complete essay. If it does, you are ready to write an essay now. If not then you need to organize it. Usually there are 4-5 paras in a short essay; 1.intro, 2.body1(point1), 3.body2(point2), 4.body3(point3), 5.conclusion.

You have some ideas that you can group to 3 main points to make 3 body paraghaps

1. Good opportunity for education
-More time for kids and family

2. Plenty of jobs available in the city

3. Convienience
-Public transportation
-Good facilities like Mall, medical, Market

4. Entertainment
-More social life
-Closer to events happening in city
dhyosungk 1 / 2  
Mar 23, 2011   #3
It sounds like this is a persuasive essay. If so, consider using refutations. They make extremely solid evidences.
An example of refutations:
"Some people say so and so. But I say...." etc.
The example above was a terrible example, but hopefully you get my point.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Mar 25, 2011   #4
Great thread, everyone. Thanks!

I'll do some grammar corrections.

...because of the many reasons.

Plenty of jobs are available in the city.

As there are plenty of jobs available in the city, it will be easier for them to find a suitable job. ---Good sentence!

But in rural areas there are very few jobs.---I added s

Do not capitalize "city" here:
I believe that the city is the most happening place to live, because...

Good facilities like the mall, medical clinics, markets -- the city is full of ...

:-)


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