A glance at the two pie charts provided reveals the various nutrition of two different dinners.
The two pie charts compare the percentage of several nutrients in medium baked potato and macaroni.
there is a dramatic rise
You can't use "rise" or "fall" in this essay as there is no change here.
there is a dramatic rise of carbohydrates and saturated fat in macaroni than medium baked potato
Macaroni has higher proportions of carbohydrates and saturated fat than medium baked potato.
most widely enjoyed
"enjoy" is the wrong word -> You had better write: Carbohydrates account for the highest proportion of both dinners
a negligible 10 percent in medium baked potato, saturated fat is over double in macaroni.
Meanwhile, saturated fat takes up over 20% of macaroni, doubling the corresponding figure for medium baked potato.
In stark contrast, however ,
all other nutrition decrease in macaroni.
As I mentioned above, this is wrongly used. You should write: constitute a lower proportion
most second widely enjoyed
Again, this is incorrect. Also, it should be "the second most", not "the most second"
is different from macaroni
Protein is the same. Its percentage is different.
there are also marked declines in nutritional consistency of glucose and other nutrients.
are the highest percentage
make up the highest percentage
five various nutrition
five nutritional compounds
I hope this helps!