When you deal with IELTS, the first thing the assessor sees is your layout, which shows whole of your essay. If the layout is difficult to read, which is let's say: no spaces between paragraphs, then he/she immediately knows your writing needs more work to read.
Hence, I suggest you to leave one space every time you open a new paragraph.
This intro shows complexity.
Possible solution: I always highlight keywords from the prompt. Then simply paraphrase them. Have a look at the prompt with the boldface types:
In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?
Let me give a try:A general lack of wide-ranging health care and fitness leads health problems. One example is obesity. I would argue life-changing decisions can be the main factors. I too believe the best measures can be taken to tackle this problem.Joy of life is more important than is earning money,(no comma here) because the purpose of getting money is to make our life happy
Many Companies that encourage their employees to get involved in have a gathering sports programs in Indonesia, result a significant increase in health and safety at work proves that the health quality of their employees is increasing.
Avoiding junk food and fat foodsareis
Avoidingis a subject as gerund. Then word
is is a predicate
Hope this helps :D