Writing is what we do in everyday life. In fact, we are all writers. We write basic things like listing chores, doing homework, making letters or emailing your friends. Writing is for all ages. Like the subject Math, only few people like Math the same as in writing. Not everyone of us are good in writing. But writing leads us to understand things, expands ideas, and organize our thoughts that are already in our minds. Through writing, we can connect with our environment and our daily routine. If we think critically, this would help us to be successful in college. The better we write the further we will get in a career.
Great! Some things to expand on:
Writing is for all ages
Tell the reader more about this fact- maybe state the benefits of using writing as a form of self expression, a form of catharsis, as in creative writing and poetry.
Like the subject Math, only few people like Math the same as in writing.
Not true. I would not use this as an example
Not everyone of us are good in writing.
This is stating the obvious.
If we think critically, this would help us to be successful in college.
If you say this, explain it more- and be sure to relate this notion to the idea of writing.
The better we write the further we will get in a career.
Use some examples to back up this statement because it sounds vague.
You are off to a good start, you have excellent ideas, all you need to do is build upon the facts you have stated. Choose about 3 KEY points that you'd like to make and focus on those, surrounding those points with further examples to support those points. Best of luck to you :)