Universities should also give students access to world of knowledge but it depends on each student how he or she will take the advantage of it.
Maybe this sentence could be made in this way with a couple of changes.
Universities should provide students with the access to academic world while it depends on whether they would like to take the advantage of it.
I still think that the student should re-work the essay and make it on point, so that it better describes his or her feelings, and that it answers the prompt correctly. Then, and only then, can we correct the grammar and the spelling, etc.