Unanswered [3] / Featured [2] / URGENT [0]   

    help     or  

Essay Forum / Writing Feedback /      

Do we live better than our forefathers?



ken99mThreads: 5
Posts: 17
Author: Ken zan
   
Jan 7, 2012, 05:32am   #1
The emergence of advanced technology has made humankind to live luxurious life. Today, people indulge themselves with modern innovations, which did not exist in precedent years. Current era has coddled men with e-commerce, advanced communication ways, video conferences, digital libraries and so on. These inventions instigate men to strive more. Due to the contemporary modernism, world is called global village.

In precedent years it was impossible to cure many diseases. In the same way, it was very hard for people to perform Hajj, go abroad for education and contact with cronies with communication channel of that time. In previous years, our forefathers use to study on lamps. They worked mostly in the agriculture field. They had no machines to finish job sooner. Similarly, they had no proper hospitals and medicines for their cure. Previous manufactured were handmade; and much of the time consuming in making.

These days, people are one touch away from their cronies. Modern civilization and industrialization have created more job opportunities. Populace choose career of own wish and do job accordingly. In contemporary world, we talk about artificial heart transplantation, hair transplantation, face surgery and so on. Moreover, men have reached moon, and are trying to explore other planets.This was not possible in the prior years. At present, fast transportation system has made common and businessmen to accomplish their work in short span. Science has made time saver machines these days.

Surely, we live more prosperous life as compare to our forefathers. Current life is incomparable with the earlier one. Modern innovations initiate men to live more comfortable life, and "the day is not far from us, when our small tribe would be pampering at Mars".



lcohenThreads: -
Posts: 1
Author: Lynn Cohen
   
Jan 8, 2012, 07:48am   #2
I love the topic and your thought process on the answers but it seems you are missing some articles that make it difficult to read. For instance, The emergence of advanced technology has made humankind able to live luxurious life. The current era has coddled men with e-commerce, advanced communication ways, video conferences, digital libraries and so on. and other advanced technologies.

I really like the essay - but I would go through each sentence and make sure the structure is sound.


ken99mThreads: 5
Posts: 17
Author: Ken zan
   
Jan 9, 2012, 03:30am   #3
@lcohen

thanks,i shall be waiting for that.


EF_SusanThreads: -
Posts: 3,434
Author: Susan O'Neill, EssayForum.com
[Moderator] Likes 4  
Jan 12, 2012, 09:24pm   #4
The emergence of advanced technology has allowed humankind to live luxurious lives.

Current era has coddled men with e-commerce, advanced communication, ways, video conferences, digital libraries and so on.

These inventions instigate men to strive for more.

Due to the contemporary modernism, the world is called a global village.

In past years it was impossible to cure many diseases.

In the same way, it was very hard for people to perform Hajj, go abroad for education and contact with cronies with communication channel of that time.

In previous years, our forefathers used to study on lamps.---(?)

They had no machines to finish the job sooner.

Previously, manufactured items were handmade; and much of them time consuming in the making.

In the contemporary world, we talk about artificial heart transplants, hair transplants, face surgery and so on.

Moreover, men have reached the moon, and are trying to explore other planets.

Surely, we live a more prosperous life as compared to our forefathers.

Modern innovations initiate men to live a more comfortable life, and "the day is not far from us, when our small tribe would be pampering at Mars".

:)


ken99mThreads: 5
Posts: 17
Author: Ken zan
   
Jan 15, 2012, 11:26am   #5
@ EF_Susan
Thanks a LOT, God bless u.




Essay Forum / Writing Feedback / Unanswered [this forum] / Featured / Similar

Similar discussions:


Random: IELTS: International Graduations of Canadian Colleges; New Brunswick highest %


This thread has been closed.

Home - Search - About Us - Faq - EF Contributors - Contact Us

Copyright © 2006-2014 EssayForum.com  Disclaimer, Privacy Policy, TOS  EssayForum RSS