I agree with muroslav. I'll help to edit your writing, hopefully I have not misinterpreted what you meant so as to change the meaning..
HavingI have a B.E Comp degree with versatile experience of 5 years. As after completeingcompleting my degree, I wasbecame a computer teacher in a institute, simutaneously I was takinggained the knowledge of computer hardware,. then I started developing interest in technical field,. later on I upgraded myself to higher technology I and started dealing with servers & did, I achieved the SUN Solaris certification and cleared the same with , clearing it withgood marksresults.
hemlata: After working in the technical field for longer period & dealing with many senior persons & & higher authorities, I realized that if being a married female I can work in a men oriented field & take the challenging jobs/task & complete it with in the time frame then why not I also should be at a high position or at senior position if I have the caliber then why should I not explore myself.
This portion is way too long and confusing. You should break it down into shorter sentences. Maybe something like this:
After working in the technical field for a long period of time, and having dealt with many senior person of high authorities, I realized that I can challenge myself to greater heights. If I, a married woman, can work in a men-oriented field; taking up the challenging tasks and completing them within the requested timeframe, then I should be able to accomplish even more. I should try to get a higher position since I have the caliber.
All my dreamswill be achieved &and my hardwork will be completed through a good B school & I know it is none other than ISB. As ISB dont look only for the candidates who are book worm but the candidates who can prove themself & who has positive attitude & confidence in themself. My hardwork would be worthwhile if only I get admitted to ISB.
Hope it helped :]
All the best to you
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