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"My virtual flying career" - Turning Point Essay - Grade 9


DanVas 1 / -  
Mar 2, 2011   #1
I am writing an essay about a turning point in my life. I decided to write about my passion for aviation, and how it transformed the way I look at life.

You have any ideas on how to improve my essay? Reply here. Also, im looking for a title.

P.S I am a grade 9 student.

Copyright by Dan Vasiljevs.

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Turning Point
The feeling of being trapped is claustrophobic - trapped in a dimension full of limits, full of stress, full of greed. That sensation is experienced by many in today's world, who are caught in the traffic jam of events in our society. The people that experience this feeling have dreams. They envision themselves completing these dreams. Some, who are faithful, even plan out a path to attain these visualizations but usually get discouraged by the seemingly-long process. This is exactly the feeling I became used to overcoming during all of my existence. Little did I know - this sensation is just another obstacle that lies in my fascinating journey.

"American 523, cleared for takeoff, runway 33R, fly runway heading, contact departure on 128.8 after takeoff."

This was just another routine day in my flying career. My virtual flying career, that is, where I soar the blue skies of Flight Simulator X, a realistic flight simulation game that I had received as a gift for one of my birthdays. I was told the simulation tool had a steep learning curve, with all of the virtual air traffic controllers sitting at their computers and speaking with us, virtual pilots through our sturdy headsets. Ever since I began learning, I gradually became more and more hooked to this interesting piece of learning software, to the point where I had known everything inside out. What was strange, I felt a strange sense of satisfaction as I was flying in these virtual skies for hours on end which I had never received before. With time, I realized that this could be a great career opportunity that I would be interested in.

Time passed, and I was meeting many aspiring pilots from all over the world with the help of this great bonding network. What amazed me is that each person had their own story to tell, and why it is that they dream about taking it to the skies. Summer was fast approaching, and I thought this could be the perfect possibility to gain some experience. Not virtual experience of course, I have plenty of that, but actual flying experience - see if I wanted to pursue the aviation field. I started asking around, and researching the laws on flying in Canada. I stumbled upon an organization that offered flying lessons during the summers with a professional instructor at Buttonville Airport, in the GTA. I was immediately hit with a sense of happiness, now that I know people of my age could have a chance to actually fly an aircraft. After a long discussion, me and my parents eventually called the organization, and arranged a flying lesson during the end of July, at a costly price. I'm sure it would be worth it, as this is bringing me a step closer to fulfilling my dream.

I stared at the instructor's glaring face under the evening sunlight. I was waiting for this day for a long while, and it's finally happening. As the instructor went through the various checklists a Cessna 172 would need to operate properly, I glanced at every single knob and display. I felt a sense of achievement. All those years of flight simulation had taught me what the purpose of each knob, display, and button is. As I was admiring the beauty of the aircraft, the instructor suddenly nudged my back in order for me to begin the takeoff sequence. I pressed my hand firmly against the throttle lever, advanced it, and sooner than I expected - the plane lifted off.

The moment suddenly took control of me, and everything slowed down. The feeling of being trapped was suddenly forever erased, and became replaced by a true feeling of freedom. I had just accomplished what man wished to do since his very first existence. The beams of the red sunset rebounded against the aircraft, forming an irregular shape around it. I sensed the presence of God. He was protecting my aircraft, and paving the way. My future was unfolding right in front of my very own eyes, and there, God delivered the message - humanity can accomplish anything, with enough faith, passion, and effort.

"When once you have tasted flight, you will forever walk the earth with your eyes turned skyward, for there you have been, and there you will always long to return." - Leonardo DaVinci
EF_Susan - / 2,364 12  
Mar 2, 2011   #2
"The feeling of being trapped is claustrophobic - trapped in a dimension full of limits, full of stress, full of greed."
This sentence, and the rest of paragraph 1, is very interesting. It's written almost poetically. It is a good attention grabber.

I also feel that the quote you ended on was perfect for your paper and a great way to summarize your passion.

"What was strange, I felt a strange sense of satisfaction" The word strange here sounds a little repetitive. Also, try using a thesaurus (possibly on dictionary.com) and you may be able to find a more powerful word to describe what you were feeling.

Also, you touch upon a feeling of claustrophobia in the first paragraph. Is that you're reason for wanting to fly? Since this is about your turning point, perhaps you should try to focus a bit more on what draws you to flying.

You chose a great topic and have written it really well! Great job!


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