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GeeneshThreads: 21
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Author: Sangeetha Govinden
   
Jun 24, 2011, 09:27am   #1
Unlimited use of cars may cause many problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce the problem, the public should be discouraged to use cars. What are your opinions?

Someone has said it right : cars have indeed become an article of dress without which we feel uncertain , unclad and incomplete. This is the reason the number of cars on the roads is on the rise each year. Undoubtedly, this has caused serious congestion on the roads and longer commuting periods. Surveys reveal that this condition is more likely to worsen in the future. Hence, effective solutions must be achieved in order to lessen the problem of over using cars. Some suggest that the public should be discouraged to use cars. I agree to the aforementioned resolution, provided that those in charge improve the conditions of the public transports, with the government introducing certain policies.

First of all, in order to persuade the public to make use of the public transports frequently, it is important for the authorities to construct more free parks. By so doing, people can drive from their respective homes and finally take the public transport such as bus or the light rail transit (LRT) into the central where they work or study. As a result, they will be able to not only enjoy a more relaxed journey, but also will be able to reduce the traffic jams on the road. Besides that, passengers would prefer to travel in a comfortable condition. So, if companies enhance their services, for instance by keeping their transports clean always, it is more likely that they retain as well as draw more satisfied passengers.

Next, the government should have more tolls along the urban motorways. As a consequence, many would opt to use the public transports as they will be able to save money on their travels. This policy has been successfully implemented in many cities and is certainly effective in reducing the number of cars on the road. Apart from that, by increasing the price of parking permits and restricting the number of car parks in urban areas, undeniably, more car users will abandon their cars in favour of public transports.

To put it in a nutshell, the usage of cars should indeed be trimmed down. Instead, people can choose to use the public transports or even walk if their destinations are only a stone's throw away from their homes. If this happens, grave problems on the road can thus be diminished and all can definitely travel at ease.



amroscaThreads: 4
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Author: Ana Maria Rosca
   
Jun 24, 2011, 12:15pm   #2
Hei Sangeetha! :D
First of all, your English is beautiful! The essay was concise and coherent and I must agree with you on the matter of public transportation. I also think that people should use bikes more often. They are usually even faster than buses/tramways.

Undoubtedly, this has caused serious congestion on the roads(/traffic congestion) and longer commuting periods. -- I suggested this so you can avoid repeating "on the roads"

Hence, effective solutions must be achieved in order to lessen the problem of overusing cars.

[...], they will be able to not only enjoy a more relaxed journey, but also will be able to reduce the traffic jams on the road.

[...] by keeping their transports always clean always, [...]

To put it in a nutshell, [...] -- this sounds so cute! I imagine a little squirrel putting all transport in a nutshell ... nvm.

Hope this was at least a bit helpful.


ajit88raiThreads: 23
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Author: ARness (Ajit Rai)
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Jun 24, 2011, 12:32pm   #3
Hi,
well first of all i would like to compliment you on your english- it is really cool-

as far as the idea is concerned- i would say that if u would have tried writing against this topic- you could have written lots of various points-thats my view.
for example- v cant blame only the cars for the traffic jams- the most imp measure would be to implement very strict traffic rules-banish all road encroachments-increase the width ofroads n making over-bridges to accomodate for the ever increasing population..

as far as car is concerned-firstly they r much more safer than a bike-plus in countries like usa where places r very far off n people live in suburb,there is not always public transport available-so cars n private transport is more than essential.

i hope it helps u.
good luck n cheers


GeeneshThreads: 21
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Author: Sangeetha Govinden
   
Jun 24, 2011, 11:07pm   #4
thanks ana ...
thanks ajit rai.. i tinkur point of view is good. i will do my corrections ..


EF_KevinThreads: 33
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Jun 26, 2011, 07:20pm   #5
Someone has said it right : cars have indeed become an article of dress without which we feel uncertain , unclad and incomplete.---How true! It's too bad we feel the need to have them! People get killed in them every day.

Some suggest that the public should be discouraged to use cars. Do it like this:
...discouraged from using cars.

i.e. just like this:
He discouraged me from playing the accordion, because he thought it was not a good instrument.


As a consequence, many would opt to use the public transports as they will be able to save money on their travels.---clever.. great job

You can just type "use" instead of usage:
To put it in a nutshell, the use of cars should...
USAGE was okay, but a little awkward. "Use" is simpler and better.

:-) Well done!!!


GeeneshThreads: 21
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Author: Sangeetha Govinden
   
Jun 27, 2011, 10:42pm   #6
thanks EF Kevin.. it was helpful..




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