Travel within a group with guide? 'we do not enjoy the traveling, can't go everywhere'

Hi, I am wondering if people can give me some starting points on writing this.

The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. As we know, travel was become a favorite hobby and there are many way to do it. For some people, they think to travel in a group led by tour guide more good than alone. I agree with statement, travel is in a group more enjoy than alone. But, maybe some people in other place do not have same argument. They may have reason why they do not like to travel in a group by a tour guide.

Travel was become needs for living, many people can do travel. I think travel is a recreation when we were bored to do activity every day. Nowadays, many people are work just for travel. They save their salary and then they will do traveling. If we do not have friend to travel together maybe we can go traveling in a group led by a tour guide. I ever do traveling in a group led by tour guide, traveling with a tour guide is more enjoyable. We can visit a new place that we do not know before. Traveling with group make you are meet a new friend.

Even though, there are still people enjoy to travel alone. They think to travel in a group make their time tossed out. To travel with many people make we are not enjoy the traveling. We are not go everywhere because we are have a group. When we want to go other place but they do not to go, that is make disturb our traveling.

In conclusion, actually everyone has separate way to do what they want. Now, there are many way to do traveling. Alone or with a group it depends on you. Everyone has each comfort to everything.

1. You should give a topic or a question for this essay.
2. You have some mistakes in grammar:
- More good (x) => Better
- Travel (v) can't be a subject
- Was become (x) => become
This is my introduction: :)


On these days, when the living conditions are more and more modern, travelling easily becomes an interest of lots of people. Some people argued that having trips alone will be more comfortable due to they are able to manage their time and destinations in that place. The opponents of such statement said that travelling in a group led by a tour guide can be the best option for those who wish to discover another place. From my point of view, travelling with others people under the direction of a tour guide is safer and easier.

Good luck for your study! I hope my writing can help you a litte bit in your essay! ^^

thanks for you comment, I hope in other writing I can better good :)

many people are work just for travel.

you are meeta new friend.

Hi, ernhy,,i think they are double verb :)

To travel with many people make we are notdo not enjoy the traveling.

We are notdo not go everywhere because we are have a group.

erhny,, you should more careful when you make negative sentence :)

Thanks for your comment brother ^^

Hello ernhy.

good morning.

Just information for you. i think, you should give your opinion that you agree with the statement.
because, giving opinion will strong about your writing and add score.
I wish become deliberation for you.

Thank you.

You still have not introduced your issue topic to the reader. So, do not open your essay with your opinion because it is too early for the reader to conceive that your opinion is justifiable.

Problems with grammatical mechanics for this sentence. One of them is called comma splice, occuring when you use a comma to join two complete sentences without placing an appropriate joining word between them.