Its a well written essay.. Just my suggestion
The creation of jobs is also a response to the booming tourism. The need for manpower will arise to provide and supply the increasing needs of the visitors. For the business-inclined, it will be the perfect time to set up their businesses without having to worry about the number of people who will avail the products and services being offered. These new jobs are the sources of money for the laborers and business oweners alike.
Shouldnt the introduction have both sides of the topic since both will be discussed in the following paragraphs and it would give the examiner a short brief of what you will discuss.
sources of money
source of money
put into consideration
taken into consideration
For instance, garbage disposal may become a problem due to the increase volume of wastes and of people who who fail to properly dispose their wastes.
For instance, garbage disposal may become a problematic/difficult task due to increase in waste volume and people wouldn't dispose their wastes.
because all the
becuase of all the
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