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IELTS TOPIC: Technology Vs Relationships ; Is this positive or negative?



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Author: Yteakyo
   
May 3, 2012, 10:51am   #1
IELTS TOPIC: In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? has this become a positive or negative development?

21st century has seen a period that with the advent of advances in technology, the way of people connecting or interacting with each other is not as same as 10 years ago.

It is generally believed that science and technology have come to pervade a variety types of personal relationship. First of all, telephones and mobiles can be regard as a necessary part of human life in modern society. Compared to the original way of setting up relationships, writing letters or visiting a friend's home, this new technology gives people access to contact others in a easier way. Moreover, increasing numbers of computers have came into our lives, internet therefore has greatly changed the way of communication. Social network, such as Facebook or twitter, allows people to contact with old acquaintance or know new friends by simply clicking their mouse. Additionally, some TV programmes also play a crucial role of changing people's interacting method. For example, a show named 'Find your true love' is quite popular in Japan, which introduces men to young ladies via three or four videos. Interestingly, 80% women suggest that they believe they can find their Mr. Right by this programme.

In spite of the merits of this development ( time and money saving), its drawbacks should not be ignored. For one thing, as a result of greatly relying on TV or computer, people are likely to stay at home becoming couch-dwellers or lead a sedentary life. Undoubted, this kind of lifestyle could pose threat to people's physical health condition, further, leading them to suffer from mental disease, such as, depression. For another, it is possible for many people to lose the capacity to making friends. Yet, managing interpersonal relationship in a real context is a comprehensive skill, which is not simply like inputting a name on a webpage.

In sum, we cannot stop the influence of the technology, seen every corner of the world. Yet, what we can do is to take the advantage and endeavour to minimise the adverse effects. After all, human beings is an active creature. The most appropriate lifestyle for us is not living on an isolated land, but interacting with other social members constantly.

Did I off the topic? writing is a tough job.
'human beings' 'science and technology' should use ' is' or 'are' ?



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Author: Felicite H. Joe
   
May 3, 2012, 04:40pm   #2
IELTS TOPIC: In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? has this become a positive or negative development?

21st century has witnessed a period that with the advent of advances in technology, WITH REGARD TO the way of people ARE connecting or interacting with each WHICH IS other is not as same as 10 years ago.

It is generally believed that science and technology have come to pervade a variety OF types of personal relationship. First of all, telephones and CELLULAR PHONES can be regardED as a necessary part of human life in modern society. Compared to the TRADITIONAL original way of setting up BUILDING OR ESTABLISHING relationships, SUCH AS writing letters or visiting a friend's home, this new technology gives people THE ABILITY TO CONTACT others in a easier way. Moreover, increasing numbers of computers have came into ENTERED our lives. THEREFORE THE WORLD WIDE WEB internet therefore has greatly changed the PREDOMINANT OR SOCIALLY ACCEPTABLE way of communication. Social network SOCIAL MEDIA, such as Facebook or twitter, allows people to contact with RECONNECT WITH old acquaintance or AS WELL AS ESTABLISHING new friends by simply clicking their BY THE SIMPLE CLICK OF A mouse. Additionally, some TV programmes TELEVISION PROGRAMS HAVE also playED a crucial role IN THE of changing OF people's interacting method. For example, a show named 'Find your true love' is quite popular in Japan. IT introduces men to young ladies via three or four videos. Interestingly, 80% women suggest that they believe they can find their Mr. Right by this program.

In spite of the TECHNOLOGICAL BENIFITS ( time and money saving), its drawbacks should not be ignored. For one thing, as a result of greatly relying on TELEVISION or computer, people are likely to stay at home becoming couch-dwellers, INTROVERTS AND BEGIN TO lead a sedentary lifeSTYLE. Undoubted, this kind of lifestyle could pose threat to people's physical health condition, further, leading them to suffer from mental disease, such as, depression. For another, it is possible for many people to lose the capacity to making friends. Yet, managing interpersonal relationship in a real context is a comprehensive skill, which is not simply like inputting a name on a webpage.

In sumMARY, we cannot stop the influence of the technology, seen every corner of the world WITNESSED WORLD WIDE. Yet, what we can do is to take the advantage and endeavour to minimise the adverse effects. After all, human beings is an active creature. The most appropriate lifestyle for us is not living on an isolated land, but interacting with other social members constantly.

Did I off the topic? writing is a tough job.
'human beings' 'science and technology' should use ' is' or 'are' ?





YOU MIGHT CONSIDER USING MY SUGGESTED PHRASES IN ALL CAPS. PLEASE TAKE A MOMENT TO REVIEW MY THREAD


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Author: Felicite H. Joe
   
May 3, 2012, 04:54pm   #3
This copy was put through a general spell check and grammar check for basic errors. You shoudl try that before posting as it saves time on rewrites.





21st century has seen a period that with the advent of advances in technology, the way of people connecting or interacting with each other is not as same as 10 years ago.

It is generally believed that science and technology have come to pervade variety types of personal relationship. First of all, telephones and mobiles can be regard as a necessary part of human life in modern society. Compared to the original way of setting up relationships, writing letters or visiting a friend's home, this new technology gives people access to contact others in an easier way. Moreover, increasing numbers of computers have come into our lives; internet therefore has greatly changed the way of communication. Social network, such as Facebook or twitter, allows people to contact with old acquaintance or know new friends by simply clicking their mouse. Additionally, some TV programs also play a crucial role of changing people's interacting method. For example, a show named 'Find your true love' is quite popular in Japan, which introduces men to young ladies via three or four videos. Interestingly, 80% women suggest that they believe they can find their Mr. Right by this program.

In spite of the merits of this development (time and money saving), its drawbacks should not be ignored. For one thing, as a result of greatly relying on TV or computer, people are likely to stay at home becoming couch-dwellers or lead a sedentary life. Undoubted, this kind of lifestyle could pose threat to people's physical health condition, further, leading them to suffer from mental disease, such as, depression. For another, it is possible for many people to lose the capacity to making friends. Yet, managing interpersonal relationship in a real context is a comprehensive skill, which is not simply like inputting a name on a webpage.

In sum, we cannot stop the influence of the technology, seen every corner of the world. Yet, what we can do is to take the advantage and endeavor to minimize the adverse effects. After all, human beings are an active creature. The most appropriate lifestyle for us is not living on an isolated land, but interacting with other social members constantly.


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Author: Yteakyo
   
May 4, 2012, 08:46am   #4
Thank you very much. Have a good weekend. Cheers, S




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