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TOEFL - Universities offer people opportunity to learn and improve their skills


scsqpd 2 / 5 1  
Apr 9, 2014   #1
Topic:People attend college or unversity for many different reasons(for example, new experience, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specofoc resons and details to suport your answer?

People attend universities for many reasons. There are three reasons that I believed most people attend for are prepare for careers, increasing their knowledge and improve their ability.

Most people consider preparing for careers as the most important reason. Students will learn more knowledge and skill during the period of studying in the university. They learn the knowledge that are relevant to their career in the future. For example, Students will need to learn many lessons such as medicine, chemistry and so on if they want to be a doctor in the future. They will have more experience in the area they want to study. They need to practice their skill in the school more and more to adopt themselves to the environment which their job maybe looks like. For example, Students who study biology need to do experiment in the lab to practice their skill such as operating machine, knowing the methods and so on.

Another reason is that they can increase their knowledge. Students will take many subjects in class. They will learn the basic knowledge that is relevant to their careers. Students have to broaden their view toward global perspective. The university offer dual degree program. They also can learn different area of knowledge in the university to enhance their knowledge. There are many interdisciplinary fields of two or more area in the industry like bioinformation involve computer and biology, biomedical engineering involve biology, medicine, physics, and machinery.

Last but not least, people can improve their skill in the university. Students can improve their communicate skill by interact with their classmates, teachers. They can improve organize skill by organize an activity or event. They also can improve their independent thinking during studying in classes.

Generally, Universities offer people opportunity to learn and improve their skills, knowledge and the ability. So People can prepare themselves to be more competitive for the career. I think these reasons are most people attend university.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Apr 9, 2014   #2
There are three reasons that I believedbelievewhy most people attend universities. Theyfor are to prepare themselves for careers, increasingtheiracquire moreknowledge in their respective field and improve their ability.skills.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Apr 9, 2014   #3
Most peoplestudents consider preparing for careers as the most important reason for attending college. Students will learnacquire more knowledge and skills during the period of studying in the university degree course.They learn the knowledge that are relevant to their career in the future (this sounds repetitive).
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Apr 9, 2014   #4
Last but not least,

This adds no value. Better omit or rewrite this expression. What I see is that many students think the memorization of the perfect phrase is much more acceptable. As a result, they use it every time when they write. And to tell you the truth it doesn't impress the readers at all to finish reading the essay.

The first thing the reader sees is your layout, which shows whole of your essay. If the layout is difficult to read, which is let's say: no spaces between paragraphs, then he/she immediately knows your writing needs more work to read. Hence, I suggest you to leave one space every time you open a new paragraph.
OP scsqpd 2 / 5 1  
Apr 9, 2014   #5
Thanks very much!!!
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Apr 10, 2014   #6
Follow this approach

Yes, Dumi is right. I learn a lot from her. Thanks Dumi :D

Also, I want you to pay special attention to her approach. I believe this approach brings you to earn a good score for your writing.

With this structure, you are easy to develop your paragraph properly. This is good for coherence and cohesion between the sentence-to-paragraph-to-essay construction, and for which in the five-paragraph structure this is weak.

Hope this helps
OP scsqpd 2 / 5 1  
Apr 18, 2014   #7
Eddies and Dumi, Thanks for yours advice very much!!! I will take it next time I write.


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