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What are the important qualities of a good son or daughter?



vaishali1980Threads: 26
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Author: vaishali
   
Feb 3, 2011, 05:14pm   #1
What are the important qualities of a good son or daughter? Have these qualities changed or remained the same over time in your culture? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.


Parents sactifies for their children from birth to until they are alive. Nowadays question arose about quality of a son or daughter. In last generation, a son follows route what his parents chose and a daughter become hose wife only; but the situation is changed. New generation want freedom and don't want responsibility. Everyone....
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KathyLalaThreads: 21
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Feb 3, 2011, 06:57pm   #2
I try to give some suggestions for the first 2 paraghaps

=> Parents sacrifice for their children from birth to until they are alive
=> In last generation, a son followed route what his parents chose and a daughter was told to be a housewife only. However, the situation is changed (I think last generation happens in the past, I would use past tense)
=> New generation wants freedom and..
=> ... important to think about the good qualities of a son...
=> In my opinion, a good son or daughter should obey, communicate, and respect his or her parents in any circumstances.
=> First, I believe that a child should obey his parents' order because they are experienced and they know better what is good or bad for their child.
=> It is their responsiblity to obey their suggetion (Confused sentence, who are they? child or parents?)
=> Parents always sacrifice everything for their child
Although working Moms and Dads spend a great deal of time on their jobs, they spend that money to buy food, cloths and desires for their child.
=> Parents always supres (save) their own desires but try to complete their children's demand (needs)
=> When their children turn come they should at least try to complete little bit their desires. (I don't get this sentence)
=> For example, sometimes parents need to help picking up or buying some stuff(picking up packages, buying grocery, be specific, don't use stuff) from shop or paying bill, so that a child should obey their order without giving any excuse.


vaishali1980Threads: 26
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Author: vaishali
   
Feb 3, 2011, 10:48pm   #3
Wow Kathy, Very helpful for me this gread help. Thanks again.

I tryed to reread and currect my some mistakes. please give me more suggestion.

Parents sacrifice their life for their children from child's birth to until parents are alive. Nowadays question arose about quality of a son or daughter because in past, a son followed route what his parents chose and a daughter was told to be a housewife only. However, the situation is changed, new generation youngstars want freedom and don't want responsibility of thier parents. Everyone is someone's a son or a daughter, so it is very important to think about the good qualities of a son or a daughter. In my opionon, a good son or daughter who obey, communicate and respect his or her ...
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KathyLalaThreads: 21
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Author: Kathy Hinh
   
Feb 4, 2011, 05:54pm   #4
Second, a good son or daughter should communicate with his or her parents. The proper communication is very important because miscommunication leads to break someone's feeling or a relationship. Once children are grown up, some of them don't like to talk much with parents; they talk with their parents only when they want to accomplish their demands. A good son or daughter should often keep conversation with Mom and Dad, explaining to them their goals, situations, and plans. If parents disagree with a child's decision, a child should try to convey his or her idea and explain why it is important. For example, generally parents want their children to follow their career. So if a father is a doctor or a business person, he expects his child to be a doctor or a business person too ( or you can say: "....his child to have the same career". But sometimes their son's or daughter's interest is different = [However, sometimes his son or daughter has no interest with his or her father's career], and if it happens, then a child should explain to his or her parents nicely or (politely, properly, clearly...).
Third, a quality child should always respect his or her parents. I hear many cases that a son beats, lives seperatly, and ignore his older parents and so on.
=>Once they grown up they don't like any advoice or suggestion from parents. Parents advoice is foolish or backword for them. In my opinion a son or daughter must understand them and give respect in any circumstances.<=(rewrite again these 3 sentences, remember your thesis sentence "a quality child should respect his or her parents". Answer the question why should a child respect his or her parents? Some answers may be: because they are experience, deep understanding, great knowlege, wisdom, showing your respect = showing your thinking adult, education......things like that---do not repeat words over and over again)
=> Furthermore, parents has responsibility to teach them correct way and donot enforce their desire or dreams on them. A child growth is on parents hand.<=(This para can be deleted because you're talking about "a quality child" not about parent)
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vaishali1980Threads: 26
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Author: vaishali
   
Feb 4, 2011, 11:01pm   #5
Thanks Kathy

I learn a lot from your explanation.


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Feb 10, 2011, 01:21pm   #6
Kathy and Vaishali, I am so impressed with all the great participation I see from you. You are some of our most valuable members, and I think you for contributing so much here. EssayForum Contributor Page Put us on your resume!

Here is a rule called "number agreement" for a nice sound when the voice of the reader's mind reader your sentence:
Parents sacrifice their lives...

for their children from child's birth to until the end of the parents' lives. Nowadays a question arose about ...

Look: parents' orders
The main reason I believe that a child should obey the parents' orders is that they are experienced and ...


The second quality is the good son or daughter's willingness to keep communication with parents.

The proper communication is very importan in any relationship. Misscommunication lead to break hurt someone's feelings. Once children are grown some of them don't like to talk much with parents. They talk with them to accomplish their demand goals, but that is all. A son or daughter should...


thier idia their idea and keep communication with parents.

Look: a quality is a noun. So, I use "willingness."
The thrid third quality, a son or daughter should have is he/she should willingness always give respect to them.

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vaishali1980Threads: 26
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Author: vaishali
   
Feb 10, 2011, 03:51pm   #7
Thanks Susan for help.

I would like to become EF but I am scaring. I feel that my English is not good mostly grammer and might be I will suggest some wrong suggestion. When I will get confidence then only I will become EF.

Here is my rewrite essay -
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Parents sacrifice their lives for their children from birth until parents' lives. Nowadays a question arose about quality of a son or daughter because in past, a son followed route what his parents chose and a daughter was told to be a housewife only. However, the situation is changed, new generation youngstars want freedom and don't want responsibility of thier parents. Everyone is someone's a son or a daughter, so it is very important to think about the good qualities of a son or a daughter. In my opionon, a good son or daughter who obey, communicate and respect his or her parents in any circumstances.

The main reason I believe that a child should obey the parents' order that they are experienced and they know better what is good or bad for their child. The child responsiblity is obey their suggetion. Parents always scrifice everything for thier child. Although parents earn money, they compramise spend that money on themself, they spend money for their child to providing shulter, food, cloths and desires. Parents always suppress their own desirs but try to complete their children's demand. When their children turn come, children should try to complete parents desires in form of helping their daily activities or complete their dreams. For example, some times parents need help like they ask childent to go and bring some things from shop or pay bill in some office, child should obey their order without giving any excuse.

The second quality, a good son or daughter's willingness to keep communication with parents. The proper communication is very importan in any relationship. Misscommunication lead to hurt someone's feelings. Once children are grown some of them don't like to talk much with parents. They talk with them to accomplish their goals. A son or daughter should always keep communication with mom and dad. Explain to parents their goals, situations and what now they are doing. If parents are not agree with a children's decision, children's should try to convey their idea and explain why it is an important to them. Example, generally parents want to follow thier children in same route what they did. If father is a doctor, or having a bussiness, they expect from child to take care of it. But sometimes their son's or daughter's interest is different. It is responsibility of child to convey thier idea and keep communication with parents.

The third quality, a son or daughter should have is willingness always give respect to them. I heard many cases that a son beats his parents, lives seperatly, not helps in parents old days and so on. Once they grown up they don't like any advoice or suggestion from parents. Parents advoice is foolish or backword for them. In my opinion a son or daughter must understand them and give respect in any circumstances.

In conclusion, a good son or daughter has a responsibility to obey parents and keep communication with them. He or she must respect them and take care when they need. This all qualites are universal and never been going to change over time or culture.


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Feb 10, 2011, 08:44pm   #8
...from birth until the end of the parents' lives.

Nowadays a question has arisen about quality life of a son or daughter because in the past, a son followed route what his parents chose and a daughter was told to be a housewife only. However, the situation is changed, new generation youngsters want freedom and don't want responsibility of their parents. Everyone is someone's a son or a daughter, so it is very important to think about the good qualities of a son or a daughter. In my opinion, a good son or daughter who will obey, communicate and respect his or her parents in any circumstances.

The child's responsibility is to obey their suggestion.


You have a lot of spelling errors, so you should use a spellchecker as part of your writing practice. I corrected some errors above, but your English is definitely good and clear.

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vaishali1980Threads: 26
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Author: vaishali
   
Feb 11, 2011, 08:55pm   #9
Thanks Kevin encouraging me.

Previously the forum has spellchecker but now I have to be write carefully ):

Nowadays a question has arisen about life of a son or daughter because --- If I write 'life' word, it feel to me not related to subject


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Feb 12, 2011, 04:47pm   #10
vaishali1980:
Previously the forum has spellchecker but now I have to be write carefully ):

If you use Mozilla Firefox as your browser, it has a built in spell checker. I think a lot of browsers do.

Nowadays a question has arisen about ...This approach is overused, and I think people should not use it. Here are some alternatives:
  • It is interesting to notice how expectations for a son or daughter have changed in the 21st century.
  • Opinions differ about the way a son or daughter should make decisions about life, and whether they should listen to the ideas of the parents.

Instead of the "life" you can write "decisions."


vaishali1980Threads: 26
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Author: vaishali
   
Feb 13, 2011, 12:32pm   #11
Thanks Susan deffinetly I will try.

Ohh ok , I was using Mozilla Firefox, it was showing spell checker. Now days I am using explorer, but I thought this forum has spell checker and you switch off that dictionary.




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