The essence of this statement underscores the necessity to expose yourself to others in order to strengthen our aptitude.
your..Deemed provincial , I was advised to hold a discussion with other classmates for gleaning eclectic ideas
did you mean provincially ???It was something that could have been done it individually.
So, teamwork is essential as it helps to have better results with little effort and in lesser time too.
if you can replace this sentence, it gives more colour to the view.
thus, teamwork not only proved to be less time consuming but also fruitful with a lesser degree of effort.
your writing need to become a little more complex. you have good vocabulary and good sentence formation with efficient grammar. so you can afford to make your essay a more professional type. after a few simple sentences, you can use a difficult one sentence. you have the potential to easily do that!!This implies you alone can easily do something but hardly can do appropriately.
this implies that you alone...The two ballasts of smart personality interaction and communication flairs can be procured only when we are in a mass not single.
use rather instead.Hence, in for making ourselves fit to the dynamic environment we must have interactive and communication skills and obviously for this being able to work in group is almost indispensible.
communicative. ...Let it be a community service or any other, institutional task, you ought to have teamwork spirit.
you ought to have a teamwork spirit. also remove the comma between other and institutionalyou have great convincing power in your writitng! i contradicted with your view. bit in the end i felt i was wrong!
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