Toefl-Teachers encouraging students to question everything 'for our knowledge, o

Hi, this is my first post so I hope I did it right. can you please check my toefl essay? this is the second one I've ever done so I'm not sure if I did it right. thank you for your time!

Question: do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should encourage their students to question everything. use examples and reasons to support your position.

When it comes to learning, I believe that we have to do everything we can and teachers have a
fundamental role in this process. Their job is not just teach us what we need to know but to prepare us for
our future. Questioning is the basis of research, knowledge and progress so is imperative that teachers
encourage their students to question everything.

Firstly encouraging students never stop questioning is the best way to let them have a complete and
various knowledge. Since we are kids if somebody told us something we automatically asked why. As
children, we were curious about what is around us, but when we grow lots stop asking that little but
significant question. Furthermore, teachers must involve us in this research to have a better knowledge and
a most various education letting us discover and study thing that we may not do at schools.

Moreover, philosophy is fundamental for our future to use us to ask questions since we will not have
teachers for our entire life. When you are used to ask yourself questions you will not stop. I think that in
this process the study of philosophy occupies a special role. I believe that philosophy is the science of
asking questions because this is what philosophers do. They never stop at what they see but the asked
themselves questions as why do I exist? This subject makes us independent in this process.

Finally everybody should never entirely believe to one person's informations because sometimes are
wrong. I think that we should always check or go further with the information they give us. Once my
teacher deliberately gave us a wrong information because she wanted to see if we checked or not. At the
beginning, I saw that something was wrong but she was my teacher so she could not be wrong but that was
too strange and I needed to check. The day after I told her what I discovered and she was happy.

In conclusion the teacher must let us questioning for our knowledge, our future and even to let us have the
right and complete information because this is the teacher's job and every good teacher should be
interested in their student's future.

Their job is not just teach us what we need to know but to prepare us for
our future.

Well, it seems you can write well and also you have good ideas. However, I'd like to suggest you an approach for constructing your intro;

Have these three parts in your introduction.

Thank you very much!

Agreed.


A writer needs to keep in mind that the intro is often what a reader remembers best. Your intro should be the best part of your essay. If you could, state your own opinion in the introduction itself with a statement expressing your opinion very clearly. That helps you take the reader in your desired direction.

5 or 4 paragraphs?
Well, if you have a question that you don't like at all, then you can write with a 5-paragraph essay. You write one introduction, three bodies, and one conclusion.This can help you write more words, but some students, that I see, put grandiose ideas, by writing too many words. Uppsss.., remember, 30 minutes to finish your essay are a must :D

Finally every one should never fully trust a person because the information is sometimes wrong.

... what do you mean by this sentence? It is not clear :( You need to begin the para with a reason that you use to justify your position on the issue.


... I feel this paragraph is totally out of topic. Follow the structure suggested by Pahan for your body paragraphs.

Pay attention to the approaches we have suggested to you above as your essay looks so lengthy and you may not be able to complete the task on time if you don't follow an appropriate structure.

Firstly encouraging students never stop questioning. (stop here)It is the best way to let them have a complete and
various knowledge they desire . Since we are kidsThe kids would keep on asking questions almost on everything that others tell them due to their curiosity.if somebody told us something we automatically asked why.


Here, you pay very little focus on the actual theme of your prompt which is why teachers should encourage children to raise questions. Stay aligned with your prompt always.