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IELTS TASK 1; region and by gender for the year 2000.


Eva Novita Sari 47 / 71 2  
Apr 10, 2014   #1
Question:
The chart below shows estimated world literacy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000.
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Answer:
There are the chart shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and gender in the year 2000 between female and male. In general, illiteracy rates in the region South Asia higher than other regions.

Firstly,There are male illiteracy for the 6 areas shown. In the chart, the lowest illiteracy rates were Developed Countries, Latin America/Caribbean, East Asia/Oceania which have percentage each regions as big as 1 %, 10 %, and 8 %. Furthermore, the rates for region Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States, South Asia have percentage consist of 31 %, 29 %, and 34 %. These three areas were higher than other regions. Secondly, the lowest for female illiteracy rates were again Developed Countries, Latin America/Caribbean, East Asia/Oceania with rates approximately 2 %, 12 %, and 20 %. Then, Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States, South Asia have percentage namely 48 %, 52 %, and 56 %.

Interestingly there was Developed Countries consists of male and female have illiteracy rates fewest than other regions.

In conclusion, female illiteracy was higher relatively in each areas and male undergo increase slightly in each regions.



Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Apr 10, 2014   #2
Well, first of all you need to attend to the structure of this task.
ernhy 17 / 28  
Apr 11, 2014   #3
There are the chart shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and gender in the year 2000 between female and male.

sist, Look at the year "2000".
BOMAT_IRA 29 / 40  
Apr 11, 2014   #4
overall, play attention >> to grammar and punctuation mark.. :)
niesaysi 16 / 290 85  
Apr 11, 2014   #5
There are the chart shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and gender in the year 2000 between female and male.

The chart showsthe estimated world illiteracy rates by region and gender in the year 2000 between female and male.

I will just rectify the following sentences in terms of grammatical structure.

Firstly,There are male illiteracy for the 6 areas shown.

Firstly, the bar graph illustrates male illiteracy in all regions.

In the chart, the lowest illiteracy rates were Developed Countries, Latin America/Caribbean, East Asia/Oceania which have percentage each regions as big as 1 %, 10 %, and 8 %.

Among the six regions, Developed Countries, Latin America/Caribbean, and East Asia/Oceania got the lowest illiteracy rates with a percentage of 1 %, 10 %, and 8 %.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Apr 11, 2014   #6
In conclusion, female illiteracy was higher relatively in each areas and male undergo increase slightly in each regions.

For this task, it is better to have an OVERVIEW rather than a CONCLUSION because this task is not a normal essay writing task, but a task that aims at assessing your report writing skills.

A conclusion is your final judgement or opinion. For the task 2 essay you need to have that because it is based on an argument or issue. However, Task 1 asks expects a report of your observations without analysis or opinions. On the other hand, an "overview" is a simple description of the main points. It is a summary of the information shown in the graph or chart.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Apr 11, 2014   #7
Developed Countries, Latin America/Caribbean, East Asia/Oceania which have percentage each regions as big as 1 %, 10 %, and 8 %.
Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States, South Asia have percentage consist of 31 %, 29 %, and 34 %.
Latin America/Caribbean, East Asia/Oceania with rates approximately 2 %, 12 %, and 20 %.
Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States, South Asia have percentage namely 48 %, 52 %, and 56 %.

Those sentences are called 'shopping list', by listing obvious figures one after another. The best way is to compare and contrast the key trends. This shows more professional writing than does the previous style.

Interestingly there was Developed Countries consists of male and female have illiteracy rates fewest than other regions.

A fact that is interesting, I don't think this area can be categorized :(
BOMAT_IRA 29 / 40  
Apr 12, 2014   #8
There are the chart shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and gender in the year 2000 between female and male.

I think, better >> the chart shows the estimated world ...
or the bar chart shows ...
upinipin 32 / 49 1  
Apr 23, 2014   #9
Interestingly there was Developed Countries consists of male and female have illiteracy rates fewest than other regions.

i hope you explain more in this paragraph


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