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IELTS Task 1 : Planning for the town


tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Jan 15, 2014   #1
The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map depicts a town named Garlsdon in which has a population of 65,000. The local state has planning to establish a supermarket in the one part of two potential areas.

Overall, S1 is located between the main road and the railway to Hindon. What is more, S2 is situated in a traffic-free zone. However, running along S1 and S2 is the railway line.

A more detailed look at the map shows that the main difference between S1 and S2 is that S1 located in outside of the town, while S2 lies in the town centre. Road and rail can be compared as public transport facilities and their location have linked with three small towns. Standing in contrast, the main road is provided from three areas to visit in the Town centre. In the opposite, S1 only has main road from Hindon, so it would be more difficult to reach from Bransdon and Cransdon.

According to the map, S1 is situated in the northwest of Garlsdon, but it is close to the residential area of the town. S2 is near the housing area, which surrounds the town centre. Interestingly, Bransdon is linked to Garlsdon by the main road and does not have access to visit at S1. S2 is located in a traffic-free zone which is an area in a town where transport is not permitted to enter, but there is railway.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Jan 15, 2014   #2
Where is the map? You should have uploaded it for others to have a look before commenting on your essay. Use the "Attach file(s)" feature in the Message block for uploading your diagrams.

The map depicts a town named Garlsdon in which has a population of 65,000.

I think you should make another post with your map. I find it is difficult to help you without seeing it :(
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Jan 16, 2014   #3
Yes, we need to have a look at the map to get an idea whether you are on the right track. However, it seems that you follow the most appropriate structure for this task which is "Introduction, Overview , Details".

The local statehas planning to establish a supermarket in the one part of two potential areas.

... wrong grammar here;
The local state is planning/ The local state has planned/ The local state plans

What is more, S2 is situated in a traffic-free zone. However, running along S1 and S2 is the railway line.

... your tone should be more formal and not personal because this task is aimed at assessing your report writing skills.
Upload the map and we would give you more relevant and useful comments :)
thakursajeeb 5 / 8  
Jan 16, 2014   #4
please upload map also. without map it will be difficult for others.


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