To sum up, despite the fact that there are some people who think studying the past is boring and useless as it brings little value to modern life, I strongly believe that it is not just important but almost compulsory for us to study history as it helps to develop critical thinking skills and doing research skills which are two very important skills that we need for living and working.
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think strongly. It sounds weird :) And maybe that sentence is too long. A reader could get confused. Nevertheless, it`s a pretty good essay I would say. The exact structure, at-the-point examples. The only thing that annoys me is the excessive usage of transitions. Don`t feel obligated to start every next sentence with transitional word. One in the beginning of the paragraph is more than enough. But this is my opinion, maybe it`s worth some of the more experienced users to contribute to the topic. Just in my view it`s like you have learned all the words from a book and now you throw them here and there.
But the important thing is that you have clear thought and good grammar. Way to go :)