Talent vs Training - Talent is more important!

Some people think that talent can give many advantages. However others consider that discipline is more important.

To my mind, talented people have more benefits than ordinary people. First of all, it is easier for them to learn specific subjects. They learn much quicker than others, thus plenty of time can be saved. That is to say, they have extra time to get additional knowledge. Furthermore, talented person can be more creative. Such people have agile mind and luxuriant imagination. Their creativity, as a result, brings their career to a higher level. And they can even become famous.

On the other hand, there are people who think that one can achieve anything if he is disciplined.

I am afraid I cannot agree with this statement. In my opinion, people who are not talented but industrious usually become good workers, but they are not likely to make great discoveries or to invent something that can revolutionize the world.

All in all, it seems to me that if one wants to be really good at something, some talent is required. And I strongly believe that gifted people have an advantage over those who do not have any inborn abilities.

I want to say the person who is talent can be stucked if he/shi do not get discipline.
those people probably have more advantages than other people. however, othe people who keep practicing do better than the people who are talent do not continue keeping progress.

State your opinion in the introduction itself. That helps you take your examiner in your desired direction.


... this is a comparison and therefore average makes better sense. Good sentence!
You need to provide specific examples for your reasoning in the body paras. For example, you can talk about a famous singer with his or her inborn talents and show the reader that he/she wouldn't have been reached such heights without talents.

You write well. Pay attention to the essay structure.

Isn't your essay too short? I think it needs a little bit flesh :D


.... You need to take this to the next para. You need an introduction for your essay. Then you need body paragraphs and a conclusion. I like the structure dumi recommends. It sounds pretty logical and easy to follow too. In this following thread you'll find it...

Your essay structure definitely needs improvement.
Seems like you have two conclusion paragraphs,
you have a paragraph with a single sentence only
try to elaborate your ideas to make your essay longer