TOEFL; Studying history and literature is more important!

Feb 1, 2013 #1

There are many controversial opinions about what subjects are more important for students to study. A number of people believe mathematics and science have been essential for the development of humanity. Some people assume that literature and history have played important role in human life. Personally, I agree with the second statement due to 2 reasons: valuable lessons and greatest mind of world.

First of all, culture and experience have been contributed by history and literature. The evolution of human has been based on history, which records events in the past for us to gain experience and learn from mistakes. Hence, we have recognized so as not to allow history repeats itself. Furthermore, those ideas espoused by illustrious people such as Aristotle and Rousseau are effectively learned by human nowadays.

Second, without history or literature, we will never know about artificial intelligence produced in the world. For instance, Alexander the Great, who studied history and literature under Aristotle, became one of history's best leaders. What's more, the ideas and teachings of the great philosophers such as Plato and Confucius are still being espoused today.

Besides, we can't deny the importance of mathematics and science. Great inventions, phenomenal innovation or technological development are indisputable achievement.

However, I still hold my opinion that studying history and literature are more important for every student generations. Evidently, valuable lessons coming from history and literature have taught us a lot about life. Moreover, these two areas are responsible for producing the wonderful minds in history, whom we want to emulate.

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Feb 3, 2013 #2

A number of people believe mathematics and science ~~have been~~are the most essential subjects for the development of humanity.

.... better to keep this sentence in present tense.

due to2two reasons:

.... this is a writing task and you write an essay. So don't have numbers, but the words only. :)
Excellent introduction.... Very good presentation of ideas. Also you have followed the most appropriate structure :)

First of all, culture and experience have been contributed by history and literature.

.... this sounds confusing :( .... Its really difficult to catch your idea too

The evolution of human has been based on history

.... this is wrong ... how can evolution be based on history? ....History reveals us how evolution happened.

You need to pay attention to keeping alignment to your topic throughout the essay...It's very important :)

OP JangGemini 8 / 51

Feb 4, 2013 #3

First of all, culture and experience have been contributed by history and literature. .... this sounds confusing :( .... Its really difficult to catch your idea too

The evolution of human has been based on history.... this is wrong ... how can evolution be based on history? ....History reveals us how evolution happened.

=> yes, I agree :D I didn't know how to start :( and a little confusing ._________. how silly :)) Anyway thanks ^^