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students' competence at all levels of the Malaysian education



no183Threads: 4
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Author: mike
   
Mar 1, 2011, 07:07am   #1
Part B (30 minutes)

You are advised to spend about 30 minutes on this task.

Present assessment of students' competence at all levels of the Malaysian education system does not capture the abilities required in the work place.

Do you agree with the statement? Give your opinion.

Write in not fewer than 250 words.


I agree with the statement above. Indeed, students came from Malaysia education system unable to capture the abilities required in the work environment. Some of these issues are due to the behaviour of the student itself. Besides, there are still weaknesses that lie in the Malaysian education system such as the technique used to teach and the technology implemented etc.
One of the main reasons which caused Malaysian student unable to capture the abilities required at the workplace is come from themselves. Bad personality such as lack of enthusiasm and seriousness in working all contribute to this factor. This can be proved when mostly all the assignment and project submitted by the student are in the bad shape. This shows that they done the work given to them seriously. Even worse, some of the students choose not to do the work given.
Besides student, unsuitable technique of teaching also can caused the student does not have the ability to work in reality. Today, teaching and learning process of mostly all the school or institute in Malaysia too rely on the example of the problem. It is common to hear that mostly all the lecture time is spend on giving and explaining example rather than conducting teaching process. As a consequence, students fail to understand regarding the theory taught.
Finally, the quality assurance also plays the role in Malaysian education system. In this case is the Malaysia Quality Assurance (MQA), an organization which accredited the level of Malaysian education system. The loose in the management of the MQA in accrediting the level of the education system do affect this issue. As we can see, now days the syllabus in our education system covers narrow range of topic compare to others. This narrow range of topic can be only enough to let the student to know the basic. But in reality, the situation encountered will be far more complicated compare to what they have learnt previously. As a result, most of them will fall at this stage.
From the previous paragraph, we can concluded that student's ability do been influenced by many party. This includes the institute, staff, and even the student itself. In order to come out with more students that have high ability, all the problems stated above must be encountered first.
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idea?
P/S i still not sure regarding my conclusion. seriously, i am bad in making conclusion :(



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Mar 3, 2011, 02:51pm   #2
Well, let's see.. I'll show you some ways to improve.

Do not say "reasons" which "cause." This is confusing, but reasons do not actually cause. Circumstances cause. Factors cause.

So... do this:
One of the main reasons factors which caused Malaysian students to be unable to capture the abilities required at the workplace is come from themselves.

.. in working all contribute to this factor. ---Oh, here is the word factor. Very good!

Verb tense problem:
Besides student, unsuitable technique of teaching also can caused cause the student does not have to lack the ability to work in reality.


The loose absence of rigor in the management ...

As we can see, nowadays the syllabus in our education system covers a narrow range of topics compared to others.

Yes, add one more sentence to the end of the conclusion paragraph... let it be a sentence that sums up the whole essay, or maybe a sentence that adds some "extra" idea for the reader to think about.

You write very well with only small mistakes!


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Author: mike
   
Mar 21, 2011, 01:42am   #3
hmm thanks :D
one more, the reason that contributes.. is this ok?


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Mar 23, 2011, 08:58pm   #4
Hmmmm... reason is a slippery word.

One reason that contributes to my decision is that I like cheese.----This would be an awkward way to use it.

One factor that contributes to my decision is that....---This is better.
One reason for my decision is that I like cheese...---This is better.


:-) Is that what you meant?


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Author: mike
   
Mar 24, 2011, 11:04am   #5
oh, okay..
i get it, i asked this because i am out of vocabulary actually.. I am conducting a thesis (research) which the result and discussion would need a lot of such words. Unfortunately, due to my poor vocabulary, i only to use the same or limited style (eg: the factor contributes, ) of phrases. Thus, i feel really "boring" when i read thru it due to my poor expression style. u know my mean right?
In simple, i am finding the way to improve my style of expression. :)


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Author: jimi chin
   
Mar 24, 2011, 12:11pm   #6
Conclusion: My suggestion.

Improve teaching method, better trained teachers.
Implement workplace experience by students doing certain hours of unpaid work placement
More independent study and research by the students instead of spoons feeded by the lectures

In additionally,if you want to explore further. Those factors could influence learning abilities.
  • culture
  • language
  • living environment
  • financial status
  • political system





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