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SHORT ESSAY Describe your favorite food- Instant-boiled mutton



ayida365Threads: 7
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Author: Kaixin Liu
   
Sep 2, 2010, 06:42pm   #1
Instruction: Describe your favorite food(It has to be specific and vivid!!!)
Length: less than 2 pages.


My favorite food is a famous Chinese dish called instant- boiled mutton.

To make the dish, one needs a hot pot, a special compound seasoning, some thin mutton slices, fish balls, beef balls, and vegetables.

The seasoning sauce is essential for the course; its ingredients are sugar, sesame oil, soy sauce, gourmet powder, preserved bean curd, vinegar and chili sauce. Because it contains so many different condiments, you can find many flavors all together in one taste—sweetness, salt, sourness and piquancy, with the appetizing aroma of beans. Its color is usually brown or crimson, depending on the amount of the chili sauce.

Once the seasoning sauce is set, one can officially begin his/her process in making instant- boiled mutton. First of all, one should fill the hot pot with water, and heat it up. When the water boils, put in mutton slices , fish balls and beef balls as well as vegetables, such as napa cabbages, spinaches, mushrooms and tofu. Wait until the color of the mutton turns from blood-red to light red, and pick the meat and vegetables up with the chopsticks into the bowl of seasoning sauce mentioned before. Dip them in the sauce fully and start to enjoy the meal.

The instant- boiled mutton combines the taste of tender meat and fresh vegetables with various flavors of the seasonings. The vegetables are light green and soft, saturating with water; one can feel the liquid exuding when taking a bite of them. The light-red mutton slices, curved like paper soaked in the water, along with white fish balls and brown beef balls, emit savory smells of meats. The water in the hot pot keeps bubbling, revealing a hilarious atmosphere, and it serves as delicious soup after the meal.

In China, the instant-boiled mutton does not only mean a meal; eating it serves as a big family/social event. The large hot pot enables many people to sit around and eat together, offering a valuable and harmonious opportunity for family/friend reunion. The warm aura the boiled water provides, the tinkly clicks of chopsticks clashing with bowls, the laughs and chats of people, together forming a warm jubilant scene, makes people feel joy and gain an appreciated heart for others— that is why most Chinese people, as hospitable and interdependent they are, love this dish.



shadejadeThreads: 4
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Author: Jade Belle
   
Sep 2, 2010, 08:19pm   #2
You could elaborate on why its your favorite food in the first sentence, not use the word one repeatedly, and combine the first and second sentences.

To make thethis dish, one you needs a hot pot, a special compound seasoning, some thin mutton slices, fish balls, beef balls, and vegetables.

Because it contains so many different condiments, you can find taste many combined flavors all together in one taste—sweetness, salty, sourness, and piquancye. with the appetizing aroma of beans. ItsThe color is usually brown or crimson, depending on the amount of the chili sauce.

Once the seasoning sauce is set, one you can officially begin his/her the process in making instant- boiled mutton has begun. First off all, one should fill the hot pot with water, and heat it up. When the water boils, put in mutton slices , fish balls and beef balls as well as vegetables, such as napa cabbages, spinach's, mushrooms and tofu. Wait until Once the color of the mutton turns from blood-red to light red, it's ready. and then Pick the meat and vegetables up with the chopsticks into the bowl of seasoning sauce mentioned before, dip them in the sauce fully, and start to enjoy the meal.

Overall it is very descriptive, good job!


ayida365Threads: 7
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Author: Kaixin Liu
   
Sep 3, 2010, 12:04am   #3
Thank you~


cf1916Threads: 5
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Author: Chun Yin Choy
   
Sep 3, 2010, 03:27am   #4
It is fine for you to describe how it's made.

The problem is you havent answer why its your favourite dish.

I think you want to answer this part in your last paragraph. However it is not clear that "its your" favourite food. I can only see "its Chinese" favourite food.

If you want to keep the last paragraph, you may need to clarify you are a Chinese in the beginning.


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Sep 4, 2010, 03:45pm   #5
ayida365:
Wait until the color of the mutton turns from blood-red to light red, and

Excellent description here.

More importantly, you have a very enjoyable writing style. It is pleasant to read these sentences that carry the attention along, engaging the reader and putting images in the eye of the mind.

You don't have any errors that I can see, so I'll give a few minor ideas...
feel the liquid exuding when taking a bite of them.

"hilarious" seems wrong in the sentence where you used it.

...the laughter and chatter of people, together forming a warm jubilant scene, make people feel joy and gain an appreciated appreciative heart for others. That is why most Chinese people, as hospitable and interdependent they are, love this dish.---- excellent ending...

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Priyanka3Threads: 6
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Author: Priyanka Singhania
   
Sep 4, 2010, 07:12pm   #6
Wow! The essay was definitely very clear and descriptive.

ayida365:
The light-red mutton slices, curved like paper soaked in the water, along with white fish balls and brown beef balls, emit savory smells of meats

That was my favorite part! I don't seem too see any other errors then what was already corrected above. Good luck! =)




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