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school uniform or giving the student the choice to decide what to wear to school.


Tiablo 2 / 2  
Dec 1, 2012   #1
Either having a school uniform or giving the students the choice to choose what to wear to school every day is a matter of great differences. In fact there are different points of view concerning this issue. On one hand, some high schools require all students to wear school uniforms. On the other hand, there are other high schools permit students to decide what to wear to school every day. However, the two points of view are respected because each one has its own reasons.

Concerned high schools who request their students to wear school uniforms, they have their own reasons. First, the students of that high school would be known to everyone that they go to that school (its name). Besides, it will set a standard between the students. In addition, it will save money.

As for those high schools who give's their student's the choice what to wear every day at the school, they also have their reasons. First, the students will not be restricted to costumes or tradition. Added to that, wearing whatever they want would make them feel comfortable and expressing their feelings in something. In addition, some students like to express their social standard.

Last but not least, regardless the differences in the two points of view, both of these rules has its own advantages and disadvantages, but from my opinion, I prefer to go to school while I am wearing whatever I want not to be restricted with one uniform every day
kc2vwx 1 / 2  
Dec 1, 2012   #2
I think you need to add more specific details pertaining to your experiences, how you've had to deal with this issue, also I believe use of "on one/ the other hand" is really hindering the flow of the essay. Your sentence structure I feel needs a little adjustment overall as I feels a big choppy, and the explains rinks of the two different views need to be more elaborate.


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