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ROSARY, MY BEST FRIEND


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Jun 11, 2012   #1
Hi! It's my first time here so I dont really know how it works but it could be great if you could correct my mistakes! Thxs

My best friend Rosary

Ever since I met my good friend Rosary, several years ago, she has been my best friend. Eventhough I don't see her that often is always good to know about her. I met her when I was little because our moms were good friends too. She's 16 year old and lives in a nice flat not far from my house.

Rosary is quite tall and thin, she has long, wavy, blonde hair but she usually wears it in a bob. She's thin faced and she's got a pale skin with some freckles and rosy cheeked. She has big brown eyes and a beautiful smile. She is very smart and sophisticates; she loves fashion, that's why she is always well-dressed. She's very good looking and boys often find her really attractive.

She always seems to be in a good mood. She brings out the best in me by being positive and cheerful. I also find her very direct and honest; she always says what she thinks. For example when we go shopping she tells me frankly what fits me and what does not. She's also very broad minded, I can say anything I like in front of her. Moreover, she is very self confident and dependable. She also has a gentle side; she is very generous and can be very considerate and tolerant too. Some people claim that she may seems quite stubborn and bossy, but reality, deep down she is an excellent person.

For all these reasons, I really like her and I am glad that Rosary is a friend of mine. I wish I could see more of her and I hope our friendship will be long and won't ever end.
EF_Susan - / 2,364 12  
Jun 11, 2012   #2
Ever since I met my good friend Rosary, ---You don't need a comma here.---several years ago, she has been my best friend.

Even though I don't see her that often, it is always good to know about her.

Rosary is quite tall and thin, and she has long, wavy, blonde hair but she usually wears it in a bob.---I think a 'bob' means it is cut short. (not sure though.)

She's thin faced and she's got a pale skin with some freckles and rosy cheeks .

She is very smart and sophisticated ; she loves fashion, that'swhich is why she is always well-dressed.

Some people claim that she may seems quite stubborn and bossy, but in reality, deep down she is an excellent person.

:)


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