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Reasons for the increasing anti-social behavior and the lack of respect to others


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Mar 31, 2012   #1
i'm preparing for IELTS exam. please!!! help me check it..

There are an increasing number of anti-social behaviors in recent years; People generally believe that the society is to blame. What do you think the causes are and who is responsible for this?

The increasing anti-social behavior and the lack of respect to others have triggered a serious impact on our society in recent years. The following content represents my view on why the case is and how to tackle it.

There are many reasons which are correlated with this problem. Chief among the causes is that people nowadays are vulnerable and can be easily influenced by negative effects, such as suffering from career frustration, encountering injustice. When facing challenges, they do not know how to cope with them. Another contributing factor is that media are exaggerating personal achievement rather than good individual qualities. So people are eager to succeed and be rich and they classify people according to their wealth. It is horrible to see that they show no respect to the old but treat the rich in the way servants treat their owner. However, unfortunately, it is almost impossible for young generation to succeed instantly they set a foot in the society. It is frustrated for them to see that gap between the rich and the poor is increasingly wide due to some poor policies. Then the enormous domestic financial burden makes them desperate and motivates them to perpetrate some anti-social behavior.

It is significant for us to stop the anti-social behavior and find the respect to others. Some feasible solutions can be outlined as follows. One to be taken is that we should teach them how to be a qualified person, instead of a wealthy one. Another one could be adopted is that the government should take some measures to improve citizen's life level and decrease the gap. In addition, as an individual, we must have a big heart and respect to everyone, regardless of his class.
kimuratakuya 10 / 32  
Apr 2, 2012   #2
You should give your claims on the issue at first , then clearly and throughly explain them in the body paragraph. Perhaps you finished the essay in a hurry.


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