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Realizing Happiness

asokapalamaThreads: 3
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 Sep 15, 2010, 04:09am   #1
Dear Frinds,

I would like to have your views about the following short essay. You all can contribute.

Thanks

Asoka


Realizing Happiness

All people in this world try to achieve happiness by various ways through out the life. Happiness is a state of mind that comes and vanished time to time. It is not remain in the mind a longer period. When you are happy you will feel free and ...

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Asoka

mea505Threads: -
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 Sep 15, 2010, 07:42am   #2
People from all walks of life try to achieve happiness through different methods. Happiness is a state of mind that seems to come and go, vanishing over a period of time. Happiness is not intended to remain in the mind for a long period (??). When one is happy, one feels free, with beautiful and attractive things around. Most people in this world are unhappy for a majority of their lives, with no real reason.

That's as far as I dare take this one for now. I think you need to work on the essay a little to get the sentence structure down correctly. What is it that you are trying to say, as when I try to correct the English, it seems as though you are conflicting yourself. Please re-write it and re-post the essay.

Thanks,

Mark

Mark Abell
asokapalamaThreads: 3
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 Sep 16, 2010, 02:50am   #3
Realizing Happiness


People from all walks of life try to achieve happiness through different methods. Happiness is a state of mind that seems to come and go, vanishing over a period of time. When one is happy, one feels free, with beautiful and attractive things around. Most people in this world are unhappy for a majority of their lives, with no real reason. The things that gave happiness changs over the time is a natural phenomenon. So people can not achive permenent happiness in this world. Even for a tempory happiness one's sound health is important. Health is the greast wealth for a person. Without good health one can not think of happiness. A person can be happy more frequantly if he can satisfied what he deserved to get or without over ambitious .

Thanks

Asoka
EF_KevinThreads: 33
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 Sep 18, 2010, 09:02am   #4
Various would be a good word here:
People from all walks of life try to achieve happiness through various methods.


The fact that things that give happiness change over the time is a natural phenomenon.

So people can not achieve permanent happiness in this world.

Even for a temporary happiness one's sound health is important. Health is the greatest wealth for a person. Without good health one can not think of happiness. A person can be happy more frequently if he can be satisfied what he deserved to get or without over ambitious . with what he has and not become overly ambitious.

This essay has a lot of wisdom!

Use a spell checker program! I corrected a lot of spelling errors. :-)

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asokapalamaThreads: 3
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 Sep 19, 2010, 05:09am   #5
People from all walks of life try to achieve happiness through different methods. Happiness is a state of mind that seems to come and go, vanishing over a period of time. When one is happy, one feels free, with beautiful and attractive things around. Most people in this world are unhappy for a majority of their lives, with no real reason. The fact that things that give happiness change over the time is a natural phenomenon. So people can not achieve permanent happiness in this world. Even for a tempory happiness one's sound health is important. Health is the greast wealth for a person. Without good health one can not think of happiness. A person can be happy more frequently with what he has and not become overly ambitious .




Thanks for contributions. I like to have more ideas.

Asoka

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